| Re: 32 Truths and 1 Lie by wilco |
darylchew 202.156.2.130 |
30-Aug-04/7:59 AM |
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| Re: along the alley by BigB |
BigB 202.156.2.50 |
30-Aug-04/7:44 AM |
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haha my first poem only! gonna be as good as you soon!
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Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
30-Aug-04/9:37 AM |
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"all things" seems like it should be "some things" or "impenetrable things." Otherwise great.
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| Re: Out goes the baby with the garbage by INTRANSIT |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
30-Aug-04/9:52 AM |
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What a shock that must have been! No wonder I don't remember it. What an unruly eviction!
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| Re: He by BigB |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
30-Aug-04/9:47 AM |
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Too many possible interpretations for my taste. I'm sure you know what you mean, and if I did, I would probably like this poem better.
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| Re: abortion by darylchew |
TAMARAG67 64.12.116.70 |
29-Aug-04/7:06 PM |
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| Re: come with me by darylchew |
BigB 202.156.2.50 |
30-Aug-04/6:43 AM |
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utopia! i feel the euphoria!
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| Re: abortion by darylchew |
BigB 202.156.2.50 |
30-Aug-04/6:45 AM |
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*shivers* the silent scream?
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INTRANSIT 152.163.252.165 |
29-Aug-04/12:44 PM |
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Try a Roseanna Danna hair do. It might help.
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| Re: Delicate Was by klosterfobik |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
29-Aug-04/9:08 AM |
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Very nice. The last line seems redundent or not needed.
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| Re: come with me by darylchew |
TAMARAG67 64.12.116.70 |
29-Aug-04/7:15 PM |
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When can we leave? I'm packing a bag-
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| Re: Andrew by Spindle |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
29-Aug-04/9:04 AM |
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| Re: Mephistophelian Seductress by SupremeDreamer |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
29-Aug-04/9:39 AM |
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Ah, to seduce him as a female Mephistopheles devil, kind but candid, unlike the women who have nothing of value to say.
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| Re: Haunted by Bachus |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
29-Aug-04/9:45 AM |
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"Like a book read too much" That's the way these memories are. Why can't we just let them lie?
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Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
29-Aug-04/9:49 AM |
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Gosh I didn't know it heaved. Maybe I'll try a minimizing bra. Sorry.
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TAMARAG67 64.12.116.70 |
29-Aug-04/7:26 PM |
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Man,you must have REALLY been messed up the night before!
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| Re: Requiem for what by Prince of Void |
SupremeDreamer 66.248.81.120 |
29-Aug-04/10:11 AM |
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Ok, let me be frank, and brutally honest:
The above enjambment of badly-stringed catch phrases is such a crock of discombobulated bullshit.
Hopefully time will be forgiving, or there's no hope for you, whatever spouse you've become attached to, and your bastard children.
You pray, I growl.
Blessed with two.. go in peace.
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INTRANSIT 152.163.252.165 |
29-Aug-04/12:37 PM |
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Waitresses
should come with
visometers
to tell customers their
sizzling fruit platters
have been ogled
enough
to prevent
dirty looks.
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| Re: the Heart is not unmade by broke by daggatolar |
fevriere 62.254.128.6 |
30-Aug-04/3:12 AM |
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I love it, but I think you could punctuate here:
"no arm's/no arms' way out"
somewhere after "is Art a way" and "root on the spot".
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| Re: along the alley by BigB |
darylchew 202.156.2.130 |
30-Aug-04/7:02 AM |
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nice. about how one almost falls down to the depths of no return, but turning back just in time. inspirational. good use of light-imagery.
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