Re: Octopussed by <{Baba^Yaga}>	darylchew 202.156.2.130	28-Aug-04/11:28 AM
its funny.
Re: abortion by darylchew	Prince of Void 217.218.131.141	29-Aug-04/6:48 AM
that's was good ..
Re: What Has It Gotten Us? by Dovina	INTRANSIT 152.163.252.165	29-Aug-04/5:14 AM
look up: more than i bargained for.
Re: Haunted by Bachus	INTRANSIT 152.163.252.165	29-Aug-04/5:17 AM
Do you think/feel it is somehow your duty to guide those who follow your work? Picked up O.B. o A. P. Spot on, as usual.
Re: Mephistophelian Seductress by SupremeDreamer	Bachus 24.130.62.63	29-Aug-04/2:31 AM
Sounds like a threnody.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 152.163.252.165	28-Aug-04/10:46 AM
And when it happens in a public facility?
Re: Andrew by Spindle	klosterfobik 205.188.116.140	28-Aug-04/9:16 PM
I look into his eyes and I'm tossed and bound I bury my face into her breast and want to masterbate and live forever I kiss her lips and pull away just so I can suck ass again.
Re: abortion by darylchew	Dovina 24.52.157.176	28-Aug-04/2:20 PM
Sounds like an angry prayer. How is your death avenged?
Re: Internal Dialogue (Mental Cock-Slapping & Anal Discipline) by DreamerSupreme	klosterfobik 205.188.116.140	28-Aug-04/7:19 PM
What is wrong with you?Was this an ode to yourself? Either way it really - truly sucks!Are you a confused 13 year old who's been molested by a gang of Eagle Scouts?Try something besides poetry for your venting. Considering this ranting poem,I believe your the mayor of Dimsville!
Re: Surfer by INTRANSIT	klosterfobik 205.188.116.140	28-Aug-04/7:23 PM
Thought of back when and salt blue ocean....very nice.
Re: Lachrymose by affei09	sliver 63.190.80.119	28-Aug-04/1:14 PM
don't know what to think for sure. the style is new to me, and it seems a bit forced in places. Overall a good pome tho'
Re: 32 Truths and 1 Lie by wilco	Dovina 24.52.157.176	28-Aug-04/2:08 PM
From my POV there are less than 32 truths here and more than one lie. Still, it's a nice collection of sayings and could-be-trues.
Re: NO TIME!! by Brandy_n_Cali	Dovina 24.52.157.176	28-Aug-04/1:46 PM
I read this yesterday and did not comment because I did not understand what you are saying. Perhaps you are holding a criminal who will soon be executed. Perhaps the person is terminally ill. Something is urgent in time, but what?
Re: abortion by darylchew	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.154.163.128	28-Aug-04/6:15 PM
Foetal rage from beyond the grave is a touching topic. And the yoda-like dialogue - "forgotten, I will be" - was a nice touch. Shame about the "all lower case" and "arbitrary line breaks", though :( -10-
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	28-Aug-04/2:17 PM
I love the idea of being camels, ready with water for the long haul. It's less clear how (this) is a combination lock. "The rock sits still and quiet letting the rain erode, both becoming mud." is a great line.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	28-Aug-04/2:01 PM
Did you get these last two right? If I were your shrink, I would first laugh at the humor in this and wonder if it’s a joke. Then I would wonder why you knew these were mistakes only after doing them. And then the next logical question, “Will he think the last two are also mistakes after he pays for the beer his friend offered to pay for and believed her when she implied he wrote a poem on toilet paper and wiped with her poem.
Re: Haiku Moon by [mojo]	Prince of Void 217.218.131.134	28-Aug-04/6:18 AM
i like this poem it's really good
regarding some deleted poem...	Prince of Void 217.218.131.134	28-Aug-04/6:30 AM
very good ..that's a nice poem
Re: St. Patrick’s Cathedral by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.21	28-Aug-04/8:17 AM
The answer to the question your poem asks is not in churches it is true. It's not in the sky nor in the forests either. Maybe it's in RLS's Requiem "Home is the sailor, home from the sea, And the hunter home from the hill." Or Donne's(?)" Glad did I live/And gladly die/And I lay myself down with a will." Good thought-provoking poem. One point better than your personal average. -10-
Re: Haunted by Bachus	SupremeDreamer 66.248.81.204	29-Aug-04/4:20 AM
Always raising the bar, indeed. If you ever failed me in that, I wouldn't drive constantly onwards for the next twilight horizon-- it wouldn't be as fun or freakish otherwise. The book stanza was the best I think.. reminds me of the condition of my photo album.