Re: Where do we hide the memories of a faded love? by Sam	horus8 24.130.62.63	12-Aug-04/2:04 PM
Uranus.
Re: My Dumb Choice...YOU by sonawrote	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.135	12-Aug-04/9:55 AM
Bulgingly stupid.
Re: Waiting In The Shadows by TearsOnRoses	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.135	12-Aug-04/10:17 AM
Four metric tons of guff, and a pinch of forlorn hope. Beautiful. Simply beautiful. -10-
regarding some deleted poem...	ForgottenSoul17 65.81.218.8	12-Aug-04/3:46 PM
eh, yeah I havent made one on Religion...So I decided to make one about the one person in my life that cares...
regarding some deleted poem...	klosterfobik 152.163.252.165	11-Aug-04/8:06 PM
Really republicans should refrain from any attempts at prose whatsoever...really.
Re: Corner of 30th and Tibbs by klosterfobik	unknown^user 68.107.136.25	11-Aug-04/8:17 PM
I really don't understand a lot of the language in this. What is/are "the recent new of guiltless lovers?"
Re: Navy Pier by Doug	klosterfobik 152.163.252.165	11-Aug-04/8:42 PM
Were you afraid to fall in love with a girl unworthy?
Re: The Hundredth End by versus_u	unknown^user 68.107.136.25	11-Aug-04/8:22 PM
I like a few individual lines in this, especially "To steal dots and mimic lines." I assume "down under" refers to "inside," but I can't help seeing it as a sexual reference in this context.
Re: A Rally by hobojo	Jeremi B. Handrinos 24.130.62.63	11-Aug-04/9:09 PM
Mold bulging, is a clap full of cheer
Re: farmer's market by fair12	richa 81.178.216.59	12-Aug-04/5:41 AM
Well written, loses it a bit at the end 'souls' and 'markers' seems a touch vague.
Re: A fish, or what's left of one by phbiscuit	richa 81.178.216.59	12-Aug-04/5:58 AM
Seems to read ok. The ending is a bit abrupt though. Some of the language is a bit unsubtle (indestructable fate).
Re: Corner of 30th and Tibbs by klosterfobik	bwickl11 204.210.50.85	12-Aug-04/12:16 AM
I like the repition at the end, adds power. A little choppy, but overall a very nice concept. Stanza 4 is a tad confusing if you were looking for a revision place I might go there. Overall, I like it!
Re: Mississippi Burnin. by SupremeDreamer	Jeremi B. Handrinos 24.130.62.63	11-Aug-04/9:13 PM
I'm a nigger, except I know how to speak clearly, and dress properly, and I don't care about wearing heavy jewelery, or impressing my friends, and I think if more niggers toned it down like me? the world could finally get jiggy with it, and throw up a holla "west-side" from da crib. word down.
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.216.59	12-Aug-04/5:47 AM
yep, if you must use people watcher keep it in the title, not at the end. 'I notice these things' is redundant because you have just written a poem from the perspective of noticing these things. Also the line breaks seem a touch arbitrary. They should really only be used for either of: (a) End of a clause. (b) To mimic normal speech patterns. (c) To emphasize an important word (like intonation in speech).
Re: Mississippi Burnin. by SupremeDreamer	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.135	12-Aug-04/9:41 AM
You turd. It's obvious you think poetry is about being raw and controversial. You put offensive words like "nigger" and "mellifluous" in your poemes to make your writing seem more dangerous. And when - shock horror! - someone thinks you're being racist, you blunder around in a massive self-righteous rant about how your work is always being misunderstood by the PC establishment. Well I've got news for you buddy: "Your subversion is a perpetual disease" Besides, the preferred nomenclature is "Negro".
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 67.119.237.120	11-Aug-04/5:50 PM
I never meant to speak for you. However, when you push me for reasons (other than I just got over it), I am left to grasp for explanations that do not exist. There is nothing wrong with you. I know you are different. I just thought I was different, and clearly I was wrong. I is too bad that there is no way for us to walk away from this without you being hurt. Just chalk this up to an experience with a stupid "bitch." Hopefully, you will feel better. Nothing I ever told you was a lie. I spoke the truth, telling you how I felt, when I felt it, just as I am doing now. There is really nothing else to be said.
regarding some deleted poem...	klosterfobik 152.163.252.165	11-Aug-04/6:47 PM
I like this except for the ending,maybe change the last 4 lines. -8-
regarding some deleted poem...	klosterfobik 152.163.252.165	11-Aug-04/6:53 PM
You just had an orgasm - sure all is rigth w/ the world.This could be better if you added a little flavor(taste,touch,hear,smell or sight)?still decent.
regarding some deleted poem...	Bobjim 81.156.151.52	12-Aug-04/8:30 AM
Hahahahaha. I like this. It amuses me. -10-
Re: farmer's market by fair12	unknown^user 209.234.180.162	12-Aug-04/9:04 AM
I love your use of color. "burry (sic) itself beneath copper blankets" is a great line. The only issue I have is with the thought of the fourth stanza continuing into the fifth so fluidly since no other stanzas do this.