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3-Aug-04/8:57 AM |
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wnot Dovinaw 195.157.153.253 |
3-Aug-04/11:27 AM |
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wnot Dovinaw 195.157.153.253 |
3-Aug-04/11:28 AM |
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| Re: Wha wha guitar by wnot Dovinaw |
some deleted user 80.205.204.53 |
3-Aug-04/11:51 AM |
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| Re: Innocence by QuirkyWonder |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
3-Aug-04/10:28 AM |
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"waiting to be wished upon."
Cute.
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| Re: In the Waiting Room by Elizabeth Bishop by Princess_Snowflake |
some deleted user 80.205.204.53 |
3-Aug-04/10:47 AM |
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How in the hell is this a limerick?
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| Re: Harvester of Sorrow by frdup717 |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
3-Aug-04/10:30 AM |
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-=Dark_Angel=- with or without P.I. embodied.
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| Re: OK, I apologize - it's steaming shite and no mistake, but it was the best I could come up with on the spur of the moment. I'm off to slit my wrists now, since writer's block has sent me spiralling into the depths of the deepest depression in human history... by Yardbird |
some deleted user 80.205.204.53 |
3-Aug-04/11:02 AM |
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I wish my writers block was this good. 10.
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cat 64.164.169.80 |
3-Aug-04/10:37 AM |
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I thought SARs was mainly in China, but I guess that wouldn't rhyme.
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| Re: He Will Be Loved by eyrbare |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
3-Aug-04/10:38 AM |
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I like this quite a bit. Try a line break after "Sharon." Falling for roses and stabbed with barbs is quite nice, reqlly, and recognized.
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| Re: Summer crush by sk8rs_rule_all |
wnot Dovinaw 195.157.153.253 |
3-Aug-04/11:27 AM |
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You are absolutely hopeless. Please give up now.
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| Re: nice day by New Life Drug |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
3-Aug-04/10:42 AM |
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Quite good, really, except for the last line, which because I'm accused of being a prude, I will say doesn't fit here.
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| Re: May I? by cedand1 |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
3-Aug-04/10:49 AM |
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I suppose if I did not relate to this in my own experience I would pass it off as another ramble by another crazy poet. But since I do, it's enlightening.
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wnot Dovinaw 195.157.153.253 |
3-Aug-04/11:26 AM |
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You're a bad-tempered old slut with a face like a bulldog's scrotum
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| Re: My two cents by hobojo |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
3-Aug-04/10:54 AM |
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This is good, but what are Cylindrical Errs? The last verse seems superfluous.
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| Re: Summer crush by sk8rs_rule_all |
unknown^user 209.234.180.162 |
3-Aug-04/10:10 AM |
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The juvenile innocence conveyed by the writing is definitely cute and amplifies the subject matter. The blaring spelling errors though are just a little too much to give it that Toys r' Us backwards R quality which may have made it too juvenile anyway.
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| Re: Mr. Stryker, Do You Really Want Some Kind of War? by cat |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
3-Aug-04/11:03 AM |
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An actual observation, no doubt. But it lacks and more than observation, nothing really to provoke thoutht.
"there were only two bus. . . "
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| Re: Cassandra. by SupremeDreamer |
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3-Aug-04/8:59 AM |
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I'd like to see the rythm a bit smoother. I like this.
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Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
3-Aug-04/10:56 AM |
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Very sad, yes. Some elaboration seems in order.
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