regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 24.130.62.63	27-Jul-04/2:09 PM
JESUS, you squelched that up.
Re: Untitled. by SupremeDreamer	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	28-Jul-04/6:40 AM
probably the most aptly "untitled" titled poem I've seen. Maybe it re-states itself once or twice too much - but somehow, that seems appropriate.
Re: Untitled. by SupremeDreamer	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	28-Jul-04/6:30 AM
For such a wonderful grouping of words I award you the poemranker "hamper brimming with turds". In recognition of the number of ... used in those poem I award you the poemranker "used hanky of overstatement".
Re: Zin/Enough/Things/Squeeze/Flow by gregsamsa222	irdaryl 24.215.163.188	27-Jul-04/6:41 PM
length has nothing to do w/ greatness.
Re: The Annual January Thaw by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 64.160.147.161	27-Jul-04/7:10 PM
Great last two lines! The reversal of whom is against what took me a re-read to get. Well worth it to someone who thinks a hike is walking to the corner 7-11 instead of taking the car.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dan garcia-Black 64.160.147.161	27-Jul-04/7:16 PM
Reality can sure screw up both daydreams and wet dreams. Write on (but not while you drive)! -10-
Re: The Serpent People by horus8	Dan garcia-Black 64.160.147.161	27-Jul-04/7:19 PM
Yeah! Yea! Yes!
regarding some deleted poem...	Dan garcia-Black 64.160.147.161	27-Jul-04/7:28 PM
Is she wearing a "white, string-theory thong bikini," S? Good tenuous thread of logic. I like it.
Re: Wake Up by unouluvme	Dan garcia-Black 64.160.147.161	27-Jul-04/7:34 PM
It seems to mean something to me, if I read it thusly, Wake up Sprint to burial grounds Pool around you let it be water Cards have spoken Don’t wait walls will advance Worlds will shrink ears will give way Cling to a cliché Kiss the poison as the antidote Speak expectations to listen Let fragrance engulf you Did you sleep? A poem of contradictions. Why not?
Re: Brats by D. $ Fontera	Dan garcia-Black 64.160.147.161	27-Jul-04/7:42 PM
I know it would be a major grammar gaff but I hear it as "He brat, She brat, You brat, Me brat." Even so, it's endearing.
Re: Bon Voyage by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Venus 67.165.242.105	27-Jul-04/7:54 PM
yeah, i feel this one
Re: Bon Voyage by Jeremi B. Handrinos	electroman1979 198.81.26.16	27-Jul-04/9:04 PM
makes me hungry
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	28-Jul-04/4:20 AM
A leaking johnny stuck to the underside of a hobo's hat. Much improved from past efforts!
Re: The bad news is his bones are like rubber by Venus	jessicazee 205.188.116.141	28-Jul-04/12:06 AM
Intriguing and yessir, I like it. Kind of ambivalent about "you lost me at 'c'" - reminds me of Jerry Maguire unfortunately..."You had me at 'hello'"... Lose the 2 commas, the rest is gravy. 8.
Re: Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus	jessicazee 205.188.116.141	28-Jul-04/12:08 AM
"Putty" doesn't need capitalization. Love "tank tops and yoga pants." Also, try it without the ellipese after the "Now"s.
Re: The bad news is his bones are like rubber by Venus	jessicazee 205.188.116.141	28-Jul-04/12:10 AM
Also, I love the title.
regarding some deleted poem...	SupremeDreamer 68.130.93.117	28-Jul-04/12:23 AM
Don't be to sure.. wheels can become stuck and engrossed in the muck of a damp road.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 217.23.37.85	28-Jul-04/3:26 AM
Tell the truth: did you invent the term "newfound glory" yourself - perhaps while living in some cave which kept you from having to hear it almost constantly on pop radio, TV, the internet, or casual conversation?
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 24.130.62.63	27-Jul-04/2:05 PM
I thought you were going to rhyme "burst" with "knockwurst", but you didn't. Also; words are not composed, music is, words are written, scrawled, memorized, spoken, sang, or RAPED, but not composed.
Re: The Annual January Thaw by Dovina	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.70	27-Jul-04/5:45 PM
Interesting shuffle.