| Re: Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus |
INTRANSIT 205.188.116.70 |
28-Jul-04/9:08 AM |
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Yes, I like the reform as well.
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Nateislate 67.42.43.179 |
28-Jul-04/11:30 AM |
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I very much like this poem. But I have a comment similar to Zodiac's. When you I read "gives me wings," I thought Red Bull.
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| Re: Barflies and Bombshells by wilco |
Nateislate 67.42.43.177 |
28-Jul-04/11:32 AM |
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Why is the bombshell gonna drop? Is she drinking too heavily?
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Nateislate 67.42.43.177 |
28-Jul-04/11:39 AM |
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"A cask such as this holds
so many memories"
So basically, the day after I black out, I should look in the bottle from which I was drinking.
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wilco 66.162.22.123 |
28-Jul-04/12:34 PM |
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patty t 24.156.158.81 |
28-Jul-04/9:18 PM |
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nb -- definitely works best if read aloud
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| Re: The Annual January Thaw by Dovina |
Venus 67.165.242.105 |
29-Jul-04/12:21 AM |
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Yeah...you've captured city life...nice work
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| Re: Comfort Food by jessicazee |
Venus 67.165.242.105 |
29-Jul-04/12:32 AM |
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To be or to ravioli??!! Oh gosh darn, I love those food metaphors! Sweet stuff.
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Venus 67.165.242.105 |
29-Jul-04/12:52 AM |
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My feeling from this is that you know her, but that in reality you're not so sure she really knows when to wear white...
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| Re: Dan by dougsoderstrom |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.135 |
28-Jul-04/7:14 AM |
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Yet another vast plethora of ellipses... as always your work bears the hallmark of "unbelievable talent" -10-
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| Re: The Two Temperaments of Man by dougsoderstrom |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.135 |
28-Jul-04/7:37 AM |
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I think the fact that you have devoted your life to the pursuit of guff, whilst simultaneously trying to justify your folly by claiming to have chosen the humbler, more intellectual path to Jesu, is definitely one of your most undermocked qualities. The other being your appallingly low academic rank, which, despite all your efforts to convince us otherwise, is not bolstered by your incredible age.
Your friend,
Doug
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edpeterson 68.79.8.240 |
28-Jul-04/7:57 AM |
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edpeterson 68.79.8.240 |
28-Jul-04/8:13 AM |
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i think that one "never" would work better
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| Re: Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.162 |
28-Jul-04/8:25 AM |
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The indentation differentiating between Then and Now works very well.
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| Re: Untitled. by SupremeDreamer |
INTRANSIT 205.188.116.70 |
28-Jul-04/9:12 AM |
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"I could not connect- and be absorbed in a stardust high" excellent line. the rest leaves me...unkempt.
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INTRANSIT 205.188.116.70 |
28-Jul-04/9:14 AM |
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The black sequined clutch-perhaps.
I don't like the questions. The rest is dandy.
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| Re: The bad news is his bones are like rubber by Venus |
wilco 66.162.22.123 |
28-Jul-04/10:09 AM |
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Hmmm, something about this that I like, even though it doesn't make any sense to me.
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| Re: Barflies and Bombshells by wilco |
Dovina 205.142.108.5 |
28-Jul-04/10:52 AM |
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May it never drop, if not from this barfly, then some other. Cheers
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Dovina 205.142.108.5 |
28-Jul-04/11:03 AM |
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Or she knows when not to wear white, maybe never. Seems too many seasons to end first.
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| Re: The bad news is his bones are like rubber by Venus |
Dovina 205.142.108.5 |
28-Jul-04/11:06 AM |
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I like enough shrouding to let me draw my own conclisions, but I don't like riddles, and this reads like a riddle.
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