Re: untitled 2 by yOum|n	frdup717 4.29.181.60	29-Jul-04/2:58 PM
i enjoyed this reminds me that im not alone in such a lonely world
Re: I Dream..... by frdup717	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.86.113.159	29-Jul-04/3:09 PM
I Cream..... I cream whene'er my gland's in yours, or 'pon your d'formèd face. I cream into your Sunday drawers, which feels unb'liev'bly ace. I cream all o'er the gloves you wear e'en though they're hard t'replace. Your voids I fill with my Swiss roll 'Til cream's all 'bout the place. -10-
Re: Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	29-Jul-04/3:45 PM
Nicely done!
Re: Often, I'll sit down to pee by Jeremi B. Handrinos	frdup717 4.29.181.60	29-Jul-04/2:51 PM
huh? i like it but i dont get it!
Re: Respect on a Quiet Hillside by Dovina	Venus 67.165.242.105	29-Jul-04/1:10 AM
Respect paid to the good life they lived - get it.
Re: Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	Venus 67.165.242.105	29-Jul-04/1:25 AM
You've captured the "spirit" of that mess perfectly.
regarding some deleted poem...	Venus 67.165.242.105	29-Jul-04/1:30 AM
Nice. You've been to Mom's house too?
regarding some deleted poem...	Venus 67.165.242.105	29-Jul-04/1:38 AM
I like the "sappiness." It follows the over-intellectualizing perfectly.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	29-Jul-04/5:58 AM
I wish it was worse, so I could be clever and say: "you need a poem" - there, I said it. But as it is, nice work. Maybe one extra line between "them?" and "Peck"? And too many ands?
Re: Something's gone wrong by zodiac	frdup717 4.29.181.60	29-Jul-04/2:57 PM
a pimple? to me it sounded like waking up and realizing that your life isn't what you thought it was. or....it could just be about a pimple.:)lol (j/k) very good i enjoyed it!
Re: Perfection by lilshorrtee	Dovina 205.142.108.5	29-Jul-04/11:09 AM
Pleas check spelling and grammar before submitting. Thank you.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 205.142.108.5	29-Jul-04/11:13 AM
"wanting me fully" sounds presumptious. Maybe because "I refuse to concentrate."
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 205.142.108.5	29-Jul-04/11:20 AM
The last line is a twist of uncertainty. The rest works.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 205.142.108.5	29-Jul-04/11:27 AM
I'd rather you said what you expect tomorrow to bring, but still it's a common feeling and therefore the stuff of poems.
Re: The circle of life by sanity	Prince of Void 217.218.131.136	29-Jul-04/12:24 PM
that was good ...the poetry mean to be the way we understand what life is in the sense of the whole concept of what we are doing here and where we are going ..it's a nice poem in this way
Re: Sleep by hobojo	Prince of Void 217.218.131.136	29-Jul-04/12:28 PM
That was good ..
Re: Sorry by shit	Prince of Void 217.218.131.136	29-Jul-04/12:32 PM
that was good ..descriping why you are sorry ..is good ..i like it
Re: The American Soldier by x0lovelylarnx0	Prince of Void 217.218.131.132	29-Jul-04/1:24 PM
Simplicity create its own beauty ..I am not sheakespeare but honestly that is a nice sonnet ...u are talented with bright future ..
Re: today the world is beauty by nentwined	Prince of Void 217.218.131.132	29-Jul-04/1:34 PM
I understand what ur mood was ...we despair about our exsitence ..actully lost in the concept that is traceless without any clue ..at that moment the world is pretending of the beauty and glory has made us to think we are so weaker...then the whole world is
Re: Four and a half paragraphs of silence by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	Prince of Void 217.218.131.132	29-Jul-04/1:40 PM
that's really good ..i think some poets had already done that ..I am glad that u try to do sth different from the other .