Re: I Dream..... by frdup717	Bachus 24.130.62.63	29-Jul-04/9:47 PM
Death by vagina.
regarding some deleted poem...	gregsamsa222 64.12.116.70	29-Jul-04/9:26 PM
would be 10, but i balk at the physical :-).
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	29-Jul-04/3:52 PM
Strange, but nicely voiced.
Re: The bad news is his bones are like rubber by Venus	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	29-Jul-04/5:53 PM
Maybe too cryptic. I can see how it might cathartic somehow, but - "what's in it for me?" "audible hint of condemnation"... what is that, exactly? Interesting even after my gripes, has a nice cadence - I just want it to mean something without too much trouble (some, is fine).
Re: I Dream..... by frdup717	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	29-Jul-04/6:19 PM
"and of your beauty and grace." meter needs tweekin, maybe... : "your beauty and your grace" Good for what it is.
regarding some deleted poem...	savagelymakeitcount 210.159.215.105	29-Jul-04/7:19 PM
I can relate. I'm a stripper. Bittersweet.
Re: Mors Omnia Solvit by shit	Bachus 24.130.62.63	29-Jul-04/9:46 PM
Christ, that was bleak... What the fuck is wrong with you? Pickled?
regarding some deleted poem...	nentwined 66.92.183.34	29-Jul-04/8:19 PM
nice. the last line really makes it, where the rest of the poem had felt "pretty but pointless". the one rough edge that throws me is "mostly long gone".
Re: thoughts of longings by katinchina	frdup717 4.29.181.60	29-Jul-04/8:40 PM
this is one of the best i've read in a while
regarding some deleted poem...	patty t 24.156.158.81	29-Jul-04/8:42 PM
you kidding? last line + 'five course dinner' is linchpin (see title)
Re: Sorry by shit	frdup717 4.29.181.60	29-Jul-04/8:45 PM
wow makes me think of my last relationship. wow
Re: Honey To The Worms by shit	frdup717 4.29.181.60	29-Jul-04/8:49 PM
i love this!!!!! very deep.dark.sexy.
regarding some deleted poem...	patty t 24.156.158.81	29-Jul-04/8:53 PM
Kerry... what is he, some kind of politican? 9 for chutzpah
Re: The bad news is his bones are like rubber by Venus	patty t 24.156.158.81	29-Jul-04/8:56 PM
cryptic likes a monkey
Re: Mors Omnia Solvit by shit	patty t 24.156.158.81	29-Jul-04/9:02 PM
my preferred translation of your luscious title is 'death melts everything' (6 years of Latin not for nothing)... if only this were a poem about microwaves.
Re: The Plum by ruella	frdup717 4.29.181.60	29-Jul-04/9:03 PM
i never really noticed.
Re: The Censor by Corey McHattan	frdup717 4.29.181.60	29-Jul-04/9:05 PM
very......aaahhhhhh.....intriguing
regarding some deleted poem...	Bachus 24.130.62.63	29-Jul-04/9:48 PM
"mostly long gone." lose 'long' when you edit next.
regarding some deleted poem...	Bachus 24.130.62.63	29-Jul-04/9:50 PM
And how you can insert Birch trees into a contemporary vagina monologue is appalling, not that I can spell appaling, but I think I took a clean drunk stab at it.
Re: Saturn by Bachus	hobojo 69.140.80.80	29-Jul-04/9:51 PM
Not all...