| Re: do you talk out loud in public? by peaceseeker |
zodiac 65.161.41.48 |
16-Jun-04/3:20 PM |
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Do you have any idea how silly your title is?
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| Re: Randomness by QuirkyWonder |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.126 |
16-Jun-04/9:12 AM |
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"I am most definitely my own person. I am funny, honest, outgoing, quirky (hence the s/n), unique...and as everyone I have met says...I am 'special'."
I think your website sums you up in a nutshell. You really are special, and I hope you always remember how lucky you are to be that way. It's because of your wonderfully unique personality that you can sit down and write whatever pops into your head, just like you've done with this piece. I really think you hit the nail on the head when you said that life's questions just seem to be open ended with no definite answer. I guess everyone has their own opinion on life and death and what we are destined for. Opinions are everything, and there really is no such thing as a wrong opinion. Apart from those opinions that say that other opinions are wrong, in which case those opinions are the wrong opinions, not the opinions they claim to refute. What do you think? Great poeme -10-
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| Re: do you talk out loud in public? by peaceseeker |
sarah 64.108.36.130 |
16-Jun-04/10:31 AM |
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Got better - hooked me more toward the end. My 2 cents. Good first couple of lines though, so got me interested. :) Some reworking and this could be killer. I dig the message. Nice work!
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| Re: West Coast Epilogue (Pseudo Triolet) by wilco |
Doug 152.163.253.1 |
15-Jun-04/9:33 PM |
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| Re: Origins by Doug |
zodiac 65.161.41.48 |
16-Jun-04/1:42 PM |
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Look, Doug, I know you think I'm a "nitpicking dickwad" and a "bore", but please try to pay attention for a second. This is as close to real criticism as I get on this site.
The entire central conceit of this poem (that Perfection and Profound beget Hope) is totally wrong. If anything, Hope and An Infinite Amount of Monkeys and A Finite Amount of Time produce Perfection, but even that's pretty much crap, too. The point is, Perfection and Hope are pretty much unrelated - or at best inversely related. If there were no such real thing as Perfection, people would still Hope. And, in fact, if there were such a thing as Perfection, and it was common enough, then there would be no such thing as Hope.
And besides, Perfection and Profound aren't even the species. If they were to breed, they could only produce some horrific Adjenoun which any half-decent midwife would wisely smother with a pillow. I would recommend picking some new abstract qualities and giving this another shot. Or even better, stop writing poems based on your bad idea of what poetry's supposed to be, which is apparently Big Capitalized Abstractions, and write something about, I don't know, your deep personal feelings or something.
Thanks,
zodiac
PS-The most appropriate response to this comment is not: "So? Your central conceit is wrong too and I gave all your poems multiple zeros."
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| Re: Misconscrew by DeadtotheWorld |
hatedestruction 167.196.165.86 |
16-Jun-04/8:22 AM |
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nice poetry, but you need to work on your grammar skills, punctuation... and a little spelling.. but other than that, I like it
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| Re: Randomness by QuirkyWonder |
hatedestruction 167.196.165.86 |
16-Jun-04/8:23 AM |
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Doug 152.163.253.1 |
15-Jun-04/8:32 PM |
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Not bad - better than anything "god's wife" ever wrote!
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
sarah 64.108.36.130 |
16-Jun-04/10:33 AM |
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| Re: Origins by Doug |
horus9 68.205.44.109 |
16-Jun-04/11:07 AM |
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Every usage of the word 'thier' is 'their'. Surprisingly enough you didn't spell anything else wrong.
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| Re: wolves by sarah |
DR Limerick 62.31.29.81 |
16-Jun-04/11:37 AM |
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I love poems like this 10/10
look at user titan69 he has lots of this sort of poem
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| Re: Bowling For Turpentine by horus8 |
titan69 62.31.29.81 |
16-Jun-04/11:54 AM |
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Dont forget YANKY BOY if it wasent for us English
you lot wouldnt egsist!!
kinda like the poem though.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
zodiac 65.161.41.48 |
16-Jun-04/1:26 PM |
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Writing a poem where you admit your failings in writing the poem is a great idea!
Cf. crystal lane swift.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Doug 152.163.253.1 |
15-Jun-04/8:21 PM |
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Very well done,but title may need to be changed.
I like it!
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Doug 152.163.253.1 |
15-Jun-04/8:27 PM |
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Keep trying you'll get it.Do not listen to "god's wife"!!
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| Re: Thin Blood by Rodavlas |
Doug 152.163.253.1 |
15-Jun-04/8:29 PM |
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So graphic!I hope your o.k.
seriously.
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| Re: A Chance to Say Goodbye by TLRufener |
Doug 152.163.253.1 |
15-Jun-04/8:38 PM |
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I wish "god's wife" would read her own "poetry" a little more often,instead of dashing other's hope for being heard.
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| Re: Litany by zodiac |
Doug 152.163.253.1 |
15-Jun-04/8:52 PM |
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I checked your website out - wow -your music is worse than your sad attempt at prose!My ears are still bleeding!Please spare us, become a forest ranger or something!
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Doug 152.163.253.1 |
15-Jun-04/9:31 PM |
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You are a much better critic than you are a writer!
Try polishing your skills as a critic and abandon writing completely!
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
fair12 66.84.225.2 |
16-Jun-04/7:50 AM |
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A little venting going on? I liked it though. I bless you with an honest 8.
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