regarding some deleted poem...	SupremeDreamer 66.42.2.18	10-Jun-04/6:52 PM
LMAO. 10.
regarding some deleted poem...	god'swife 209.178.159.34	10-Jun-04/6:55 PM
This poem has emotion, relationship, specifics the audience can relate to and understand. 4 The structure and the words you seem to 'settle' for, are still unpoetic. There's no music to it. Once a year I find my way To the place my Father loved. Mountain waterfall A little ways above our camp. I rise up, like Daddy, And follow the lichened trail til I arrive again To his sault of faith, my place of peace.
Re: Bugs by INTRANSIT	SupremeDreamer 66.42.2.18	10-Jun-04/6:56 PM
Your use of picasso instills in me the feeling of inadequacy. Take this blessing of ten and begone!!
Re: Of Painting by thepinkbunnyofdoom	SupremeDreamer 66.42.2.18	10-Jun-04/7:01 PM
I like it. Loaded with attitude. Blessed with eight.
regarding some deleted poem...	SupremeDreamer 66.42.2.18	10-Jun-04/7:06 PM
Let me express what this poem feels like to me over-all: Limp. But it could be stiffened into something that penetrates, if you get what I mean? So take this blessing of five.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 152.163.252.165	10-Jun-04/7:09 PM
what a phallacy.
Re: The Ocean Prefers A Sunset by wilco	SupremeDreamer 66.42.2.18	10-Jun-04/7:09 PM
Well.. you know, this doesn't look as if you put all the ability you have into this one.. if it were to be sung, I think it would come out lame. Theres the potential for this to be extended and improved though. In the mean time, I bless thee with five. Go in peace.
Re: Even manic dreamers must face Atropos by SupremeDreamer	SupremeDreamer 66.52.157.57	10-Jun-04/7:45 PM
My writers block villanelle. Hope it isn't too whiny.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 68.122.128.160	10-Jun-04/8:40 PM
Absolutely fabulous!
regarding some deleted poem...	SupremeDreamer 66.42.2.64	10-Jun-04/8:42 PM
Impressive. This is the best work I've seen from you so far. Blessed with ten.
regarding some deleted poem...	arduinn 165.21.83.246	10-Jun-04/9:56 PM
It's good but the ending leaves a bit to be desired..
Re: Midnight Chimes by TLRufener	Chasz Misleading 68.225.250.222	10-Jun-04/4:36 PM
and you'll always will be
Re: Bugs by INTRANSIT	arduinn 165.21.83.246	10-Jun-04/10:42 PM
Splendid
regarding some deleted poem...	New Life Drug 69.106.238.155	10-Jun-04/10:45 PM
sounds like Ross and Rachel haha not really umm
Re: Occam's Razor by Quarton	New Life Drug 69.106.238.155	10-Jun-04/10:47 PM
this makes no sense
Re: The daisy-chain girl by richa	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	10-Jun-04/6:00 PM
"do like [we do]" the verb "to be" is a bit overdone here, R.
Re: The Ocean Prefers A Sunset by wilco	wilco 24.176.102.131	10-Jun-04/5:05 PM
You know, and this is just me...but I think if you're going to give somebody a 0, the least you can do is leave a comment giving a reason.
Re: Occam's Razor by Quarton	Quarton 12.217.221.61	10-Jun-04/5:27 PM
I originally wrote this as a joke and admit it probably should have been left unposted. I'll do better next time(:
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.190.73.230	10-Jun-04/5:50 PM
Why be a bitch? you read my work long enough to give me a one and a 0, but no comments. If you dislike it that much just don't vote. unless you're one of those who is trying to win poemranker by eliminating all others.
Re: A life unsure by sliver	god'swife 209.178.159.34	10-Jun-04/6:23 PM
1. You never tell us who he is, in relationship to you or the world. 0 2. What is the ambrosia, the fear, the roses? 0 3. Designate what? 0 4. Drifting where? 0 5. Retrospect? So far there's nothing to look at backwards or forwards. 0 6. His agility was found by what act? 0 etc. etc. etc... Everything in this poem is completely vague, how can the audience relate to or feel the emotion of something without emotion. Can you tell me what the emotion is in this poem? No, I didn't think so. I don't have time to keep repeating myself over and over again when I read a poem that's completely in trouble. Take a class, pay someone to help you, or read books on writing poetry. Nothing in your work is clear or dramatic. You show terrible taste in your choice of words. Personally, I honestly don't think you'll ever be any good at writing poetry. Poets are born not made. You can improve, but only so far. You're poetically tone deaf. there are you happy now?