Re: The daisy-chain girl by richa	god'swife 209.178.135.111	10-Jun-04/12:23 PM
I'm comfuzzled. The 'us' isn't clear, who are 'us'? You're structure is only the best. If I take each line individually they're lovely but what does it all mean?
Re: sweet kissing me there by misslexy	god'swife 209.178.135.111	10-Jun-04/12:37 PM
eewww.
regarding some deleted poem...	god'swife 209.178.135.111	10-Jun-04/12:44 PM
Better. Get rid of 'convey meaning', it negates everything you wrote before it. Trust me.
Re: Of Painting by thepinkbunnyofdoom	god'swife 209.178.135.111	10-Jun-04/12:47 PM
Nice poem. You don't need to ask that rhetorical question, it's childish and ineffective. It truly is a masterpiece Of criticism. Your painting? Your painting looks like shit...
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.70	10-Jun-04/3:20 PM
Shin, nothing personal, puh-leeeze drop the SO. Put a comma at the end of the line and listen. The word -so- sounds like you don't care about the conversation.
Re: The daisy-chain girl by richa	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.70	10-Jun-04/5:26 AM
I'm way off but, my mind went the filthy route first, but on a second read I thought it was about the practice of poetry. A daisy chain being ones older and of lesser quality poems. Damn. Sorry I missed the first cut too. 10 for your poem 6 for me being an idiot.
Re: The Ocean Prefers A Sunset by wilco	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.70	10-Jun-04/5:47 AM
I want to like this. Especially with the caryatids. Great word ,btw. Just too piecemeal for me. Show me more about the support structures.
Re: With Reckless Abandon by MacFrantic	edpeterson 68.79.21.41	10-Jun-04/6:24 AM
everything above 3 and everything below, to infinity, is total bullshit. 10
Re: A Fractured Egg Shell by newdawnfades	TLRufener 24.158.7.169	10-Jun-04/6:59 AM
This poem seems a little odd but it's interesting. This can be compared to how fragile life is. Good work.
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.21.41	10-Jun-04/8:25 AM
guitarra, no?
Re: The Ocean Prefers A Sunset by wilco	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.249	10-Jun-04/9:41 AM
hauntingly resonates with my hang-over this morning.
Re: Bugs by INTRANSIT	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.249	10-Jun-04/9:51 AM
I love the monochromatic image. Of course, people who die by mortar shell explosions, traffic accidents and serial killers with knives die more colorfully. But the aged do tend to wilt in the way you describe.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.249	10-Jun-04/10:00 AM
Good images. I can't say this is one of your best, but it is pretty like a painting of ballerinas by Degas.
regarding some deleted poem...	thepinkbunnyofdoom 216.196.146.157	10-Jun-04/10:57 AM
Damned you and your spanish! I actually care whats under the line of stars, but I'm too lazy to translate it. Interestingly a paradox of its own sort.
regarding some deleted poem...	thepinkbunnyofdoom 216.196.146.157	10-Jun-04/11:04 AM
Maybe its just me, but it reads increbible in a Will Shatner kinda way. Rather pretty, with lots of good itellectual images. Its tied together like one of those ribbons you mentioned knotted into a bow. -10-
Re: Bugs by INTRANSIT	thepinkbunnyofdoom 216.196.146.157	10-Jun-04/11:07 AM
Yes, humans are rather limited in the beauty of death. -10-
Re: The daisy-chain girl by richa	thepinkbunnyofdoom 216.196.146.157	10-Jun-04/11:13 AM
Wow, vague with a great sense of inner wisdom being displayed, but I still feel as though I missed it. I love the slothful line 'shake the low branches
Re: Isn't it a wonder by caitydee	caitydee 64.12.116.70	10-Jun-04/11:31 AM
god'swife-How can you give me a zero and not leave a comment?
Re: Bugs by INTRANSIT	god'swife 209.178.135.111	10-Jun-04/12:00 PM
Wow, that's so much better!
regarding some deleted poem...	god'swife 209.178.135.111	10-Jun-04/12:14 PM
Unfortunately the 'trate' implies that you only 'tried' to have sex, and never actually succeeded. 'Que tuve sexo' would be wittier.