| Re: I don't know by Chasz Misleading |
sliver 63.190.80.238 |
8-Jun-04/4:03 PM |
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| Re: mutiny by Bill Z Bub |
sliver 63.190.80.238 |
8-Jun-04/4:02 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
sliver 63.190.81.70 |
8-Jun-04/7:00 PM |
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Cold you email the original to me if you still have it please? I have it somewhere but my poetry is as scattered as my mind. I hope to compare a work of mine to this masterpiece someday;/ we'll see.
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| Re: Basic by Chasz Misleading |
sliver 63.190.80.238 |
8-Jun-04/4:04 PM |
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I doubt it, We can never see who someone is entirely.
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| Re: Bitter bacardi makes the black stones dance. by SupremeDreamer |
wilco 24.176.102.131 |
8-Jun-04/3:08 PM |
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Sorry SD, just not feeling this one..
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
wilco 24.176.102.131 |
8-Jun-04/3:10 PM |
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i.e. - "Loving you will all my heart"
Should that be "with all my heart"?
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| Re: Doesn't Hurt Me by Miggy |
sliver 63.190.80.238 |
8-Jun-04/3:45 PM |
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I don't see it being any better than all the poems you have given me O's on. I hadn't noticed until lately, and I have been giving you 8's and 9's. Silly me.
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| Re: What ever happend to Kelly Green? by titan69 |
sliver 63.190.80.238 |
8-Jun-04/3:49 PM |
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| Re: Fool by arduinn |
sliver 63.190.80.238 |
8-Jun-04/3:54 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
sliver 63.190.80.238 |
8-Jun-04/4:00 PM |
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Seriously? Do you read your history? In "freeing" the filipino's before WWII American soldiers slaughtered men, women and children, just like they did the Indians in our efforts to gain more ground. etc. etc.
In any war you have to convince yourself that your enemies are sub-human (makes it easier to kill'em)
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| Re: Suicide Girl by wilco |
sliver 63.190.80.238 |
8-Jun-04/4:41 PM |
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A ten, for the quality, and another for those 5's
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| Re: Linger on by sliver |
Sunshine Conkey 172.135.63.149 |
8-Jun-04/6:02 PM |
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yeah, ya lost it on the last line. Ya started out
good though.
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| Re: Linger on by sliver |
sliver 63.190.81.70 |
8-Jun-04/6:18 PM |
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| Re: The painted Chair by Sunshine Conkey |
sliver 63.190.81.70 |
8-Jun-04/6:21 PM |
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How about titling it just 'the painted'? I really like the poem though. Everyone talks about their walls, this is original(At least to me)
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
sliver 63.190.81.70 |
8-Jun-04/6:23 PM |
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ouch. so the madman was seeking peace wih a gun in his hand?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
sliver 63.190.81.70 |
8-Jun-04/6:29 PM |
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I wouldn't mind having that kind on Insurance
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| Re: The curse of language and other scattered thoughts by Y2kSlamPoet |
INTRANSIT 64.12.116.70 |
8-Jun-04/6:38 PM |
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Are you mocking me?! Because I KNOW how to tie my shoes, mistuh man. 8 for the rant but, shouldn't this be on psyche-ranker or maybe Philo-ranker? I dunno.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
sliver 63.190.81.70 |
8-Jun-04/6:40 PM |
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Didn't care much for the poem. I think you might need to deal with a few issues. And don't try that shit in Colorado. We have what is called the 'Make My Day law'
If you show up here in my lovely home town, walk up to my door and threaten me with anything other than your mouth, I can blow your head off with my Hawkin .50 cal. and just walk away.
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| Re: mutiny by Bill Z Bub |
<~> 64.252.171.17 |
8-Jun-04/6:43 PM |
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| Re: Wedding Day by Caducus |
INTRANSIT 64.12.116.70 |
8-Jun-04/6:50 PM |
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first read: swap -noticing and ignoring-
then- with wry misery (he's already exuding)
clambered? I think you mean -clammy?
doomed (seams)?
Um that's enough for now. I see serious problems but I also saw the whole picture, I do like it.
Particularly, arrogant wind and gray expressions sauntering. Work this one, it's worth it.
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