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Dan garcia-Black 68.120.42.35 |
2-Jun-04/5:54 PM |
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Don't you ever write something bad?-10-
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| Re: Heaven Out Here by wilco |
edpeterson 68.20.9.182 |
2-Jun-04/7:37 PM |
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| Re: Sisters of mercy by titan69 |
the codeine kid 217.159.74.253 |
2-Jun-04/1:38 PM |
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i love the narcotic...robotic (ally) bit. full marks for even thinking you could get away with it. and also the line about "emotions welling" most people would have gone on to rhyme it with "penis swelling" or summat but no...you lead us astray ther reign us back in with "she put her hands across my mouth to try and stop me yelling" genius!keep up the squiggling and squirming!!!
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zodiac 66.0.86.62 |
2-Jun-04/1:53 PM |
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Wow, man! You sound like you're talking from experience! Are you a zombie?
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Bobjim 213.122.166.203 |
2-Jun-04/1:54 PM |
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Surely it should read "This collection OF dust".
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| Re: STEP 4 by the codeine kid |
wilco 24.176.102.131 |
2-Jun-04/2:02 PM |
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I liked it up until the very last line.
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| Re: Jimmy and Chichi Choo (Sub-Dylan Bullshit Blues) by the codeine kid |
wilco 24.176.102.131 |
2-Jun-04/2:03 PM |
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It does sound kind of like some of Dylans writing...Somethings not quite right though...I'm not sure what it is...I'll have to think.
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| Re: Jimmy and Chichi Choo (Sub-Dylan Bullshit Blues) by the codeine kid |
zodiac 66.0.86.62 |
2-Jun-04/2:14 PM |
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You've sure captured Dylan's talent for easy rhymes and bullshit "metaphorical" nonsense.
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| Re: Heaven Out Here by wilco |
horus8 24.130.62.63 |
2-Jun-04/4:59 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
horus8 24.130.62.63 |
2-Jun-04/2:39 PM |
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I was the bass player in the cramps before they traded me in for a Morgue Thinsythighser
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| Re: Heaven Out Here by wilco |
sliver 63.190.81.187 |
2-Jun-04/3:08 PM |
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Very well done. I have felt that same feeling, in almost the same circumstances. But not so eloquently.
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| Re: The Red Basket by pain killer |
sliver 63.190.81.187 |
2-Jun-04/3:12 PM |
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How can she be lonely with all these emotional chickens about?
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| Re: The Angel and The Ass by pain killer |
sliver 63.190.81.187 |
2-Jun-04/3:16 PM |
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Good, I don't suppose the angel felt the attraction eh?
Maybe if she'd needed to pack in to the mountains, you know - he could carry her celestial food.
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| Re: Dear Lord, by INTRANSIT |
sliver 63.190.81.187 |
2-Jun-04/3:21 PM |
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My new favorite. Ten does not begin. I especially like the scroll of life. If you are speaking to God, then your and thee should be capitalized. Fantastic writing.
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| Re: johnny dowd by the codeine kid |
titan69 62.31.23.28 |
2-Jun-04/3:22 PM |
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I tried to wright a pome when i was pissed as well.
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| Re: The Trainspotter by the codeine kid |
sliver 63.190.81.187 |
2-Jun-04/3:23 PM |
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I guess my life isn't that boring then.
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titan69 62.31.23.28 |
2-Jun-04/3:25 PM |
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first two lines said it all
then it got better 8/10
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| Re: Sisters of mercy by titan69 |
sliver 63.190.81.187 |
2-Jun-04/3:26 PM |
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They walked as if robotic? seems to fit better.
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| Re: Heaven Out Here by wilco |
titan69 62.31.23.28 |
2-Jun-04/3:26 PM |
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| Re: Kangaroos by Bobjim |
titan69 62.31.23.28 |
2-Jun-04/3:27 PM |
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