Re: a comment on genious by the_poetess	nentwined 64.60.192.130	9-Mar-05/2:40 PM
Utterly. :)
Re: a comment on A Prayer by that_funny_girl	that_funny_girl 205.188.116.195	9-Mar-05/2:36 PM
who said God does not exist who said Santa Claus does exist who was trying to Prove anything -nessa
Re: a comment on Crazy by that_funny_girl	that_funny_girl 205.188.116.195	9-Mar-05/2:35 PM
thanks - :) may i ask which parts you did not understand........simply for clarification........i might be able to explain them to you....... -nessa
Re: a comment on genious by the_poetess	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.138	9-Mar-05/2:09 PM
Us -truth seekers-, sometimes we run into a problem with our poetry when we want to say something and the urge to just ,um, archer?- the point overrides the tools used to create poetry. I find myself forcing obfuscation and declarification to "hide" what I'm saying and It's a Royal Paine-Diaz sometimes. Do you agree?
Re: a comment on knowledge building on knowledge by nentwined	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.138	9-Mar-05/2:04 PM
Just more poetry, please. Yeah, the whole portently /portentously thing has me bugged. Hot walk bugs you eh? How 'bout the lady with the chainsaw. Think she might let me use it to alter this?
Re: Striking minds by celticskatermatt1	nentwined 64.60.192.130	9-Mar-05/1:57 PM
"Blow the man down, bullies, blow the man down; Way ay - blow the man down, O Blow the man down in Liverpool town. Give me some time to blow the man down. " Sorry, doesn't work for me.
Re: genious by the_poetess	nentwined 64.60.192.130	9-Mar-05/1:53 PM
While it's a sentiment that wouldn't hurt to cram into a daily "why am I?" session, this talked about the situation from outside of it too much; make me feel how this thought applies directly to your life--grip me with context, colors, sights, smells, tastes...
Re: a comment on genious by the_poetess	nentwined 64.60.192.130	9-Mar-05/1:49 PM
_I_ am... What are you implying? :P
Re: A Nation by the_poetess	<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.130.62.63	9-Mar-05/1:22 PM
You can't even spell "arogant" right you shittle. But don't worry, communists love to milk the slower herdlings.
Re: Poet, Earth mover by INTRANSIT	nentwined 64.60.192.130	9-Mar-05/1:14 PM
I don't get the use of "portentously" here, though I like how it rolls. [[what portent does this state?]] nor "a hot walk", which rolls less well repeated piece doesn't gel for me, though I really like the individual bits not mentioned, individually.
Re: a comment on knowledge building on knowledge by nentwined	nentwined 64.60.192.130	9-Mar-05/1:09 PM
More than a haiku, or just more? Most of my "writing" has been fiction, of late; poetry happens when it moves me, or falls out of some orifice I didn't properly shut. ((Hmm. Never pictured my fingertips as an orifice before; odd. That's where poetry comes from. ;) )) Thanks for the comment :)
Re: knowledge building on knowledge by nentwined	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.67	9-Mar-05/1:05 PM
Unless you're me in which case a stiff wind blew all my seeds out to sea and i'm just wilting now. Always good when you -ain't skeered. write more damnit.
Re: eat what you want. by burgerking33	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.67	9-Mar-05/1:02 PM
burger, fries, shake, should all be the las words in each stanza. Put THAT in your cherry pie.
Re: a comment on Poet, Earth mover by INTRANSIT	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.138	9-Mar-05/12:55 PM
Well guys, here's the deal. I tried to find another word altogether, but I didn't find anything I liked. I went with portentously because I went back to the dictionary and decided this was the best solution. Anything else that bugs you? Feel free to drop the hammer.
Re: A Blind Child Speaks by Grandma	nentwined 64.60.192.130	9-Mar-05/12:28 PM
Sweet, but the meter falls apart reducing its charm, and the repetition doesn't seem to have much point.
Re: Distance by MacFrantic	nentwined 64.60.192.130	9-Mar-05/12:26 PM
I don't get what you're trying to convey, here. :/
Re: How to make a suicide bomber by Caducus	nentwined 64.60.192.130	9-Mar-05/12:25 PM
A good thought. Didn't move me as poetry, though.
Re: Deja-Vu by Rainbow_chaser	nentwined 64.60.192.130	9-Mar-05/12:23 PM
simple, and the title adds some piece of elegance to it; but it's something that's been said a million times, and likely precisely like this at least a dozen, just from the common-ness of the words going together in the manner you used. ((though google would say these words had not yet been inscribed in the collective consciousness of the internet)) p.s. relized -> realized
Re: Today, last year was on a Sunday by thepinkbunnyofdoom	Rainbow_chaser 70.50.62.135	9-Mar-05/11:46 AM
not bad, but i really enjoyed the last sentance. it really brought it togeather and gave it more meaning over all.
Re: a comment on wishes by the_poetess	Rainbow_chaser 70.50.62.135	9-Mar-05/11:39 AM
ahhh on the contrary, to respond does not mean to accept. to accept this comment i would have to agree or approve of what you stated above. I do not accept it, therefore i refuse it. perhaps i mearly replied for the stimulation of confrontation.... never assume you know all the answers. ;) ~Autumn