Re: wishes by the_poetess	JoyLuck 65.60.139.26	7-Mar-05/7:03 PM
i usually wait for the signal to clear on the porno channel so i could view some boobies, but hey...look at peacocks
Re: exercise by JoyLuck	RION12 64.136.26.226	7-Mar-05/7:01 PM
Cool. I like the way you make everything sound so simple. I like that kind of stuff in poems. I rate this poem and poet a 10.
Re: A Prayer by that_funny_girl	JoyLuck 65.60.139.26	7-Mar-05/6:54 PM
god doesn't exist but santa claus does what does this prove?
Re: For China by Fear of Garbage	JoyLuck 65.60.139.26	7-Mar-05/6:48 PM
i just wanna say... CHINA!!!!!!
Re: Come home by phbiscuit	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	7-Mar-05/6:02 PM
this was really good but just a tad too "sugary" - 8 - -megan
Re: Thundershowers and my best friend by NeeMan	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	7-Mar-05/5:53 PM
i absolutely love this 100%! - 10 - -megan
Re: a note to the politically inactive fundamentalist christians by i_am_the_popsicle	some deleted user 24.224.192.56	7-Mar-05/5:51 PM
I disagree that the foetus should have its day in court.
Re: A Sonnet for Barbara by PatColvin	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	7-Mar-05/5:46 PM
it is nice as a poem for your wife, but noone else, its rhymes are unimaginative and weak, and it doesnt have a lot of appeal -- sonnets are ahrd though so ill give you a 5 for effort -
Re: The Privaleged by i_am_the_popsicle	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50	7-Mar-05/5:45 PM
It's interesting that suicide tends to be more prevalent during peace time. Having an enemy to fight against seems to give people a sense of purpose, and while they're busy gouging out his eyes, or stamping on his balls, Kurt Cobain is merely a whining gnat on the buttocks of their subconscious.
Re: For China by Fear of Garbage	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	7-Mar-05/5:32 PM
intersting - i dont really get it though - megan
Re: a comment on a note to the politically inactive fundamentalist christians by i_am_the_popsicle	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50	7-Mar-05/5:00 PM
It's the same foetus, but it has been sucked into a morality vacuum, from which no foetal rights can escape. The only solution is to pull your trousers up as high as they will go, and pray for a miracle.
Re: The Snow Globe by Caducus	nentwined 64.60.192.130	7-Mar-05/4:49 PM
I like bits of this a lot. The last stanza really doesn't work for me. The underscores in the title bug me. Dunno. 6. could be something, though.
Re: Bugs by INTRANSIT	nentwined 64.60.192.130	7-Mar-05/4:46 PM
monochrome doesn't seem right. sepia? I like where it starts. The ending doesn't cinch it closed for me, though.
Re: a comment on Pain by DaRkMoOnLuVeR	RION12 64.136.26.226	7-Mar-05/4:42 PM
Don't take this the wrong way but you sound like you are form the UK not from IL. Sorry if I hurt your feelings but when you say bloody good job it reminds me of people from the UK. The person who wrote this poem Darkmoonlover knows what I mean.
Re: Evacuation harnessed angel Vs. The antichrist by Bachus	nentwined 64.60.192.130	7-Mar-05/4:39 PM
Hmm. I gave this a 6 back in the day. Today I give it a 10. It made me laugh.
Re: Forward My Mail by Shardik	nentwined 64.60.192.130	7-Mar-05/4:38 PM
I really like the first two stanzas. s3 doesn't do it for me at all, and s4... hmm. s4 is decent. s3 really doesn't do it for me, though.
Re: Heaven Out Here by wilco	nentwined 64.60.192.130	7-Mar-05/4:36 PM
"rivers'" -> "river's" Since you didn't capitalize the beginning of each line, it's a bit odd that you chose to after a semi-colon. A moderate collection of images, with a point, but they don't gel for me. It's too haphazardly stacatto.
Re: on the edge of creation by nentwined	nentwined 64.60.192.130	7-Mar-05/4:31 PM
Hmm. Going back in--this could use some rhythm work. The deerflies are out of place. Though I still like most of it. That's certainly a bonus.
Re: Heart Attack by ShaNoN+960317485	nentwined 64.60.192.130	7-Mar-05/4:28 PM
I liked some of the breathless feel to it, but came out more like a minor (yeah, there's no such thing--stil...) asthma attack than anything thoughtforcing. While somewhat atypical in exactly how it feels forced, it doesn't work for me.
Re: a comment on The Muses by crooked_smile	crooked_smile 152.163.100.195	7-Mar-05/4:28 PM
but was it really about not being able to write a poem? -lia