Re: a comment on Satan's Pillar: The Wisdom of Heresy. by SupremeDreamer	Dovina 12.72.5.118	2-Feb-05/6:50 PM
Then you are a believer. I knew it all along.
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.5.118	2-Feb-05/6:47 PM
I believe in telling. I think it's better than showing in many cases. But since you have expressed a like for this in general, my usual hard heart is softened, and I'll take a close look to see if maybe in this case showing might be better. If Dark Angel were to treast me with this kind of considedration, I'd let him tell me things instead of always having to destroy his ego and make him look like an ass.
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.5.118	2-Feb-05/6:43 PM
To what silly things do you refer? Surely not that you have such a study with which to soil youself.
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.5.118	2-Feb-05/6:41 PM
Did I not say that men ane women are unequal and different? If you want to argue, please do not go wandering off into some spatial unawareness of what the subject is. Many men are good at matching a dress to earrings. Many women can beat a man to death with his own shoes. If there were an internet simili, I'd be tempted right now.
Re: 32 Truths and 1 Lie by wilco	Crakyamuni 131.252.180.201	2-Feb-05/4:24 PM
Right now the telephone is the heaviest object on Earth. Goddamn man. You have mentioned at least a dozen truths from my book. After the comment you made I had a sense you were good. Genuine in your condition. Keep this love alive.
Re: A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	Goad 84.140.192.31	2-Feb-05/4:15 PM
This is really good. I liked the first two stanzas, particularly the second. I didn't like so much the meta-commentary of the last 7 lines. If you are serious about this one, try rewriting the last half a few times and see if you can stay in the image more and let the image make the commentary. (it's the old show not tell. First two stanzas are Very Good showing. Last two are more telling)
Re: a comment on Save our Self(revised to be a trek into the vent tent) by Crakyamuni	Crakyamuni 131.252.180.201	2-Feb-05/4:15 PM
wilco- A phenomenal band. I've now completely eliminated all traces of the O.G. S.o.S. due to my own distaste for it. It was about despair,obvious, maybe, but I'm in some straits right now. I feel bound to this dilemma, but crippled, without any options except blind denial. This vent tent revision is a return to a sort of stream of thought structure, which is very loose and sometimes confusing, but not contrived. I find this process can help me create something temporary but stable(like a tent),and it's rather therapeutic. I'm not seeking kudos here, or trying to contend with the prophets, but life's frustrations need an apparatus. I'm drawing with words. I'm a visual artist by blood, and a non practicing catholic in recovery, as well as an admirer of poets. You write with an honest tone in your comment, thats so rare, Thankyou. Mark
Re: Save our Self(revised to be a trek into the vent tent) by Crakyamuni	Crakyamuni 131.252.180.201	2-Feb-05/4:01 PM
I revised that crappiness. I'm completely ready for all negative stabs and jabs. Bring the pain.
Re: a comment on A love apple's just a tomato (edit of "Uprooting") by fevriere	wilco 24.165.207.93	2-Feb-05/3:31 PM
Don't make deals. it's your poem. I don't know about that one part. I'll think on it. I'm just not a big fan of rhyme in free verse.
Re: a comment on A love apple's just a tomato (edit of "Uprooting") by fevriere	fevriere 62.254.128.4	2-Feb-05/3:27 PM
Better how? Ideas, ideas. The fruit/potatoes stays but I'm going to move it to the beginning of the poem. Deal?
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 82.39.21.223	2-Feb-05/3:27 PM
What could make you think "there are no differences in their ability to reason and to think through a given situation"? For example: Most men are unable to clearly think through the situation, "Buying a dress that goes with my new earrings." Similarly, most women are unable to clearly think through the situation, "Beating a man to death with his own shoes." This "we're the same in all the areas that count" foofananny is the number one cause of women's hysteria in England today.
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 82.39.21.223	2-Feb-05/3:19 PM
It is precisely because women are less spatially aware that they come to think such silly things.
Re: a comment on Waiting for October by wilco	wilco 24.165.207.93	2-Feb-05/3:18 PM
Haven't seen it. Sorry. If I watch it will you vot on the poem though? '0)
Re: A love apple's just a tomato (edit of "Uprooting") by fevriere	wilco 24.165.207.93	2-Feb-05/3:16 PM
Not bad. I thing the smart tart bit could be better, but I like the fruit/potatoes lines.
Re: Save our Self(revised to be a trek into the vent tent) by Crakyamuni	wilco 24.165.207.93	2-Feb-05/3:13 PM
I'm really not sure what's going on here...maybe you could add a little bit more to help paint at least a little bit better picture. I'm all about abstract, but you gotta give a little more I think.
Re: No more goodbye by ShaNoN+960317485	wilco 24.165.207.93	2-Feb-05/3:10 PM
Need to fix your meter here and check your spelling.
Re: a comment on A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.13.172	2-Feb-05/3:10 PM
Surely you were not up in the stands, were you? Crakyamuni wants me to think he was, but with such a lame description of how I looked, he only wishes he was.
Re: a comment on Save our Self(revised to be a trek into the vent tent) by Crakyamuni	Crakyamuni 131.252.180.201	2-Feb-05/3:07 PM
It did. I'm sorry for the limp lashing I did this a.m. I doubt it phased you, and yet it was unbecoming. I've got things. Not your problem though. I enjoy your work, and I guess thats why it was petty to be as insulting as I was. I got defensive. Apologies.
Re: Harry & the Little Bird by Goad	wilco 24.165.207.93	2-Feb-05/3:05 PM
Perfidy, great word. I'm not really liking this too much but I'm going to give you an 8 just for that.
Re: Harry & the Little Bird by Goad	Beyond_Dreams 67.51.232.76	2-Feb-05/3:04 PM
I went to college in Schnectady.