Re: Memphis Skyline by wilco	SupremeDreamer 66.248.82.95	26-Jan-05/5:30 AM
-Nods- Shaky but I can still groove. Has a slight villanelle feel to it.
Re: a comment on Can't Fight No More by jroday	Prince of Void 217.218.131.174	26-Jan-05/5:27 AM
yeah it's a good poem......
Re: Paedophile at st catherine's by Mona Lisa	SupremeDreamer 66.248.82.95	26-Jan-05/5:27 AM
Sounds like you should pitch this as a Public Awareness Commercial...
Re: a comment on In the Shadows by Beyond_Dreams	SupremeDreamer 66.248.82.95	26-Jan-05/5:14 AM
All is lost, therefor all that is is merely shit hurled in order to postpone the inevitable. Are we at war? Do you want a jester trophy as a peace offering? Want me to do the asshat charade in order to assist you in demonstrating how ignorant, pathetic, and ultimately insignifigant I am? Are you not entertained?
Re: a comment on the pretenders by PopoyMola	SupremeDreamer 66.248.82.95	26-Jan-05/5:07 AM
Hail I, the accursed one, he who singularly personifies evil, the child of the fallen one, I who is the anti-christ.
Re: a comment on The Stone Seeker and the Stacking by darkshark	SupremeDreamer 66.248.82.95	26-Jan-05/4:58 AM
I thought it was already established that I'm one of the obsessed, deranged, overbearing sort. And actually: I plucked that literary mag bit from Darkie... I'm morphing into a morose, aphotic moth. Fuck rainbows and pretty butterflies.
Re: a comment on The Stone Seeker and the Stacking by darkshark	SupremeDreamer 66.248.82.95	26-Jan-05/4:53 AM
Divine perspective is assumed by that which is condsidered the almighty-- which according to most scripture is beyond comprehension. All-together your loved one is left in the shadow of Jehovah, which pretty much renders him as void. Now as to god bothering to remember all that each person was in life, that's simply assumed under the theistical asshat. Considering the assertion that the poem(s) are dealing with one you loved, who passed away, wouldn't it be more relevant to offer creatively your personification of him/her, what he/she meant to you, affected you, etc? http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=108181 Something which gives a hint of the poems basis... The above is an example, and mayhaps I'm generalizing, or have ideas or concepts stuck in a stubborn, narrow box, but that's my thoughts on your reply... Oh, and what a nice subtle touch of innuendo, your last final statement.. I'm a sucker for those that like romancing the stone.
Re: a comment on #28 by Lifeboatman	Lifeboatman 203.104.94.2	26-Jan-05/4:13 AM
that's okay.. and anout the Bard.. well, he's dead, isn't he?? can you give me a zero??
Re: a comment on Birth by Caducus	Caducus 172.189.154.57	26-Jan-05/2:27 AM
Thanks Wilco: An Explanation on the last stanza for milefromnowhere. Pulled from the cunt of life to the arms of death, concentrated breathing slowly leaving, reborn a Father to the baby you denied me. Last stanza is about giving up/taking ones life. It ends pretty much as it begins because in the first stanza he is born and in the last he dies BUT death in a sense IS a new beginning, this is highlighted in the line 'pulled from the cunt of life' this represents life is/does not have the purity of a womb but instead its something repugnant such as c*. The fact that in line 2 i say 'to the arms of death' normally in birth you go to the arms of a midwife but here its the gentle arms of death/peace - peace is what we are when we are fetuses. In short from the cold cunt of life to the warm embracing arms of death. 'Concentrated breathing' this is what women do as they give birth and its what the character is doing again YES in death but to him its like a rebirth, an escape, not anything sad anymore as the pain will soon be over. The last 3 lines are key as these explain his reason for wanting to die. His hopes of becoming a father have been scuppered by his lover because she doesnt want children and he loves her but cannot choose a life with love childless or become re-born through dying. As his life feels worthless he decides to end it. I tried to make the end not so much depressing but hopeful.
Re: a comment on Feudal Conflict by Dovina	jroday 204.215.33.115	26-Jan-05/2:10 AM
Feisty indeed is she.checkmate! 10
Re: a comment on A Better God by Dovina	zodiac 212.38.134.51	26-Jan-05/1:04 AM
I really don't dislike things for that reason. I dislike things because they're stupid. Except the Arabic television program Tash Matash. I love that shit.
Re: a comment on To You, My Son by Bhaskaryya	zodiac 212.38.134.51	26-Jan-05/12:57 AM
I'm sure they'd be very proud.
Re: UFO by Dovina	zodiac 212.38.134.51	26-Jan-05/12:56 AM
Balls. Give me Uranus any day.
Re: a comment on #28 by Lifeboatman	zodiac 212.38.134.51	26-Jan-05/12:50 AM
That comment was intended for Dovina. Fuck nentwined's crap comment nesting.
Re: a comment on #28 by Lifeboatman	zodiac 212.38.134.51	26-Jan-05/12:50 AM
Ibid.
Re: a comment on #28 by Lifeboatman	zodiac 212.38.134.51	26-Jan-05/12:49 AM
No it doesn't. Please, please for the love of God stop talking about Shakespeare.
Re: a comment on Tale of a lonely heart by Bhaskaryya	zodiac 212.38.134.51	26-Jan-05/12:46 AM
True. I'm working on becoming fluent in any language which allows me to travel easily in dirty countries chockfull of brown people. After Afrikaans, Hindi and Malay, I should be done.
Re: a comment on Homophobic Self-Help Poem. (For the men who drive a mustang) by SupremeDreamer	zodiac 212.38.134.51	26-Jan-05/12:33 AM
I was right about you.
Re: a comment on Road of Means by MacFrantic	MacFrantic 152.163.100.138	25-Jan-05/9:20 PM
The first stanza describes the end of everything. Just as a story is "all told" The second stanza says that the death of everyone is just a course of fate. And the title suggests that fate has nothing to do with it. :'o
Re: Never Did You by Dreammaker1024	wilco 24.165.207.93	25-Jan-05/8:01 PM
You need some line breaks in there to make it flow better. i think thi'll be all right if you do that and do a little more work to it.