Re: a comment on Only Me by heartlessempath	heartlessempath 67.183.178.115	16-Jan-05/10:22 PM
Thank you for the feedback!
Re: a comment on Only Me by heartlessempath	heartlessempath 67.183.178.115	16-Jan-05/10:22 PM
Actually, I wrote this in response to a book- In Country, by Bobbie Ann Mason. The book explores a young girl trying to find out who her father was, because he died in the Vietnam War before she was born. I started wondering what it was like for the men who came back, who didn't die, who had children and tried to cobble together some semblance of a life afterwards... And "Only Me" because I am the only testament to his existence. His name isn't on a monument, he isn't "important" enough; all he has is a child who's forced to deal with the after effects of a war.
Re: a comment on A Flower for Monet by Shuushin	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.101.5	16-Jan-05/9:56 PM
i know i have already posted about ur poem but i was just rereading it and i have to tell you that i really do love it is one of the best poems i have read in a very long time.........it is so well written -mega
Re: Obituary for the Moon by wilco	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	16-Jan-05/9:52 PM
wow.......blows my mind..........this is so ultimately excellent............10!!!!!! -mega
Re: What A Little spark Can Do by Blindpoetry	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	16-Jan-05/9:38 PM
nice.................very simple yet elegant........like (to steal the examples above) a nicely crafted cabinet............lol.............. -mega
Re: Lemons Don't Grow by Blindpoetry	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	16-Jan-05/9:34 PM
intersing......... -mega
Re: Lady Bradbury’s Excursion by Dovina	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	16-Jan-05/9:29 PM
interesting.................
Re: Vulture by Stacy Stewart	Shuushin 64.222.180.230	16-Jan-05/8:50 PM
how bout a couple line breaks there? An observation: in places you omit a word, apparently because it isn't needed - and I agree with that philosophy, but in others you pack in little extra ones as if you get paid by the letter (the first three words for starters, the on nearly every line, the first two or three. Clean that crap out and it won't be so pants.
Re: Buried On Hollowed Ground by Enchantres	Dovina 12.72.5.101	16-Jan-05/8:47 PM
"Now you see," but how so? You imply consciousness after suicide death. Better to say the killer is gone and knows nothing. vote-7 only because it's well written.
Re: Vulture by Stacy Stewart	Dovina 12.72.5.101	16-Jan-05/8:41 PM
Grammar!
Re: Only Me by heartlessempath	Shuushin 64.222.180.230	16-Jan-05/8:40 PM
an interesting idea, this. But I thinks it's a bit overdialoged - distracting. And the warrior angle could be clarified too, prolly. But really, a cool thing.
Re: Only Me by heartlessempath	Dovina 12.72.5.101	16-Jan-05/8:35 PM
What a terrible father you must have! Quite well written and convincing. Too much punctuation. The title - why only you?
Re: Buried On Hollowed Ground by Enchantres	Shuushin 64.222.180.230	16-Jan-05/8:33 PM
Despite being a suicide/death poem (something too often done and done badly) this has an unusual angle in that it's a post mortem - and I like that. What I don't like is that there are opportunities missed for some potentially nice descriptive bits: night, fog, cemetary gates. Instead you just blurt them out like a noob. Maybe loose the whole first stanza so the reader isn't immediately disappointed right off the bat.
Re: a comment on A Fake Hollywood by Blindpoetry	Blindpoetry 68.11.192.79	16-Jan-05/6:52 PM
toyanwood... yikes.
Re: A Fake Hollywood by Blindpoetry	Dovina 12.72.5.101	16-Jan-05/6:13 PM
They named Hollywood after what they thought was holly. It was not holly, but a look-alike, the toyan bush, which also has red berries at Christmas time. Hollywood's been a fake ever since. And use spellcheck!
Re: a comment on Rain by dancin_n_da_moonlite	Dovina 12.72.5.101	16-Jan-05/6:06 PM
I'm only laughing at myself, the fact that I have been in Katie's place and answered a man as she answered. The best thing about a poem is to find myself in it.
Re: a comment on A Fake Hollywood by Blindpoetry	Blindpoetry 68.11.192.79	16-Jan-05/6:02 PM
Actually. More than it is for Hollywood. It's about kids who think their life is crap. Fake Tragedies... tears on heads, sweating for ideas, on many heads. cult of fake shit. endless possibilities limited by wanting something less. blurp.
Re: A Fake Hollywood by Blindpoetry	RION12 64.136.26.226	16-Jan-05/5:46 PM
Do you really think Hollywood is that fake?
Re: a comment on You tell me by RION12	RION12 64.136.26.226	16-Jan-05/5:15 PM
I know I spell really bad. Thanks for helping me with my spelling.
Re: Rendered Genderless by PsydewaysTears	dancin_n_da_moonlite 205.188.116.135	16-Jan-05/11:26 AM
nice.....i like the ham part..........and the theme is good.......though i feel you go on just a tad longer than what is most effectiv........... -mega