| Re: a comment on Mallard by richa |
Shuushin 70.16.209.52 |
2-Jan-05/7:08 AM |
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That would depend on the perspective of the viewer... And I suppose it would be fixed their entire life.
So you are saying the disparity lies in that the duck was smiling and should have been frowning (or displaying some other emotion, like bemusement) - or was the anthropomorphism the striking thing?
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| Re: a comment on Mallard by richa |
richa 81.178.233.69 |
2-Jan-05/7:06 AM |
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Pretentious buncombe. What I meant to say was the frown and smile are part of the duck beak's same rigid pose.
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| Re: The wreck of a Memphis-Atlanta Greyhound by zodiac |
Shuushin 70.16.209.52 |
2-Jan-05/6:52 AM |
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Nicely done. I feel like it ended a little bit like the thought was pushed through a steel mesh somehow.
And the use of "akimbo" completely pulled me out of what was a very nice and interest-keeping ride.
I have no suggestion on how to fix that ending, so I leave it in your capable hands.
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| Re: a comment on Mallard by richa |
Shuushin 70.16.209.52 |
2-Jan-05/6:47 AM |
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I thought it implied, at its most general, a combination of two or more things that seem strangely combined. That's what I meant by disparity.
It can also be a beasyy that is part lion, part goat and part serpent that, oh by the way - breathes fire.
I've been kindof waiting since my original post for someone to say "Hey stupid, it also means 'orange'", or something else, but it hasn't happened. Meanwhile I've looked around and I can't find any other descriptor/meaning for chimera that helps me otherwise out.
You got something?
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| Re: Point Blank by jroday |
jroday 204.215.33.74 |
2-Jan-05/4:58 AM |
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This is my first time trying to write a "Prose Poem"
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| Re: a comment on Math Poem 3 by Dovina |
zodiac 212.118.14.17 |
2-Jan-05/4:47 AM |
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Except, of course, that "x / x/3" equals 1/3, wherever you put spaces. You meant "x/(x/3) = 3"
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| Re: Math Poem 3 by Dovina |
zodiac 212.118.11.30 |
1-Jan-05/10:20 PM |
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This is the best poem you've ever written. I'm serious.
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| Re: a comment on Mallard by richa |
zodiac 212.118.11.30 |
1-Jan-05/10:17 PM |
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I got lost, what "disparity" does chimera imply?
Welcome back.
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| Re: a comment on Elopement by Sasha |
zodiac 212.118.11.30 |
1-Jan-05/10:15 PM |
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It only reflected smaller. It refracted magnified.
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| Re: a comment on 38 Lines by auscot |
zodiac 212.118.11.30 |
1-Jan-05/10:13 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Betwixt and In Between by dougsoderstrom |
zodiac 212.118.11.30 |
1-Jan-05/10:10 PM |
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Oh............. thanks. A few more questions, if you don't mind. I'll do nice ones this time, promise.
1) Your university let you get away with a dissertation called "Religious Orientation and Meaning in Life"? No offense, but that sounds like an Exit Essay by a rather precocious 8th grader.
1a) Did you write it in the seventies, or are you a latecomer to grad school and New Agey gobble?
2) Bunk. I know because I'm a Christian Humanist from way back and you're nothing like me.
3) What did you call yourself before you were Doug Soderstom, Ph.D.?
4) Regarding your #4 above, will you be deleting this poem now?
5) I live in the Middle East. Is there any way you can just scan your dissertation and post it on the net? Barring that, can I see highlights? Even the abstract would be killer.
As always, your friend in Christ,
zodiac,
M.A., B.A.^2, CPR, LG, BD, PCV, SCA, visiting lecturer on Islam Retardation at the Al-Karak Center for Self-Care and Care, Waseya, Jordan
2 Jan 2005
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| Re: a comment on My Wife by Dovina |
zodiac 212.118.11.30 |
1-Jan-05/9:50 PM |
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I'm not trying to give you a hard time, but I think you'd do better writing something that is not so overtly sexist, or changing this one so it isn't so. That's all.
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| Re: Below Tide by D. $ Fontera |
Shuushin 70.16.209.52 |
1-Jan-05/7:44 PM |
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A nice sentiment. Hard to make an emotional dent in an event of such scope.
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| Re: a comment on 38 Lines by auscot |
Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
1-Jan-05/2:08 PM |
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Tsunami was good. Twin Forks was good. Why go here when you've got better stuff?
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| Re: a comment on 38 Lines by auscot |
auscot 138.130.95.21 |
1-Jan-05/2:03 PM |
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Thanks Dovina, and here was I trying to be lighthearted amongst all the angst, bile and gloom. Is nobody happy anymore? There is a pill you can take.
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| Re: No More Autumn Poems (Edit) by Sasha |
Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
1-Jan-05/1:54 PM |
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After feeding the tree all summer, we put on this little show of color, then die. Long live Autumn! Good poem, but I want to be serenaded.
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| Re: Spilling Out Sideways by PsydewaysTears |
Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
1-Jan-05/1:49 PM |
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Understand the crooked maze. And not a bad use of words that rhyme with it.
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| Re: 38 Lines by auscot |
Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
1-Jan-05/1:44 PM |
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So what? If you have writers block, just say so.
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| Re: An Ode To An Angel by Bhaskaryya |
Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
1-Jan-05/1:42 PM |
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"strived for more than what was mine" Good line, and I say that because I have done that.
"lucky few to have seen a miracle" Yes, and it's so easy to see afterward.
Your explanitory notes at beginning and end only detract. The poem stands on its own.
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| Re: I walk with no road by kawakurdi |
Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
1-Jan-05/1:35 PM |
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This could be said with 1/3 as many words and twice the impact.
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