BleedingRose
replying on The Bleeding Rose by BleedingRose
13 Oct 2004, 10:03 PM
... ... thanks, I think.
I have heard a little of these fallacies and disregard them as best I can when concerning any expression of the human mind or soul. I do not discredit or attempt to disprove them, but I believe poetry to be a conduit for our feelings and, as such, should reflect our inner turmoils. I speak to myself in my mind and often feel there is something within that simply cannot find the means with which to interact with the world. I do not know if others feel the same, but for this reason I see no error in expressing it.
The style of this poem is such that I enjoy reading and often write myself. I vote 9 not because it is imperfect in structure, which I believe only adds to it's effect and value, but because I would not dare give it the extremest approval untill I have seen more of your works and had a chance to compare thier worth. Furthermore, knowing you personally as I do, I am left curious and somewhat hopefull of the discovery of the one you speak of.
Yea, it was written about an sexually abusive father. What would you suggest to fix the line?
P.S. Thanks :D
Hah, sucks to be a fish.
"But not as bad as my heart.
Which is infinitely pained.
And tortured."
Dug that. -7-
Wooooah. Dig it, man. Dig it. This is the first Haiku I've ever read in my life...that I actually liked. 10 for me.
am I categorized as a brainless twit? (I mean this considering I'm the one who brought you to the site)
Definately strikes a cord with me.
the fishes partner? did you mean the fish's or fishes' im confused. are there two fish? damn. I hate fish. today my friend ate a tuna sandwich.
saweeeet I love disease
gone on any hikes lately?
she crab and he lobster are going to have wild sex and make herman's hermit babies. driftwood is hot. and so is everything about this poem.
not amazing, yet it made an impact.meaning I thought it was sad.. so thanks for that shooot. yur prince will come. and if not, just forget it. its so much more fun being a slut.
now you have a book? shit. I want to buy it and read it to all my friends. for serious.
Good job Sasha! I loved it. It flowed so smoothly, just rolls off your tongue. So how you been ol' buddy ol' pal?
Good idea, perhaps you could substitute lost for stuck in line 18? Oh and in the 4th to last line maybe say "My story," that way it isn't repeating so much and puts more emphasis on the "fairy tale" idea in the last line. :)
Thank you very much. And just in case you'd like to know, Sasha and I resolved our "differences" quite some months ago. Haven't heard from him at all lately though. Ah well. Anyways thanks for the comment, I appreciate it. :)
I changed target to armor, is it any better now?
Yea, that's sadly right. We can be tough in business, then come home and whine for attention. When he gives it, we complain it's not sincere and come to poemranker with our whiny missives.