nentwined
on Anthony & Kimberly by Brandy_n_Cali
7 Sep 2004, 8:29 PM
double meh.
ditto, ish, though workable is debatable.
a rambling rant, awkward flow, nothing new. try painting the picture of the person and situation that is causing these words to spew forth. make us feel the words instead of just throwing them out.
b3cuz th3y hur+!
please, please, please learn how to pluralize words and what apostrophes are for!
flow is awkward, concept overdone without anything to really sell it. why free verse with random line breaks when you go to such trouble to rhyme every "sentence"?
Thanks.
nice!! reminds me of one of my own
I see you changed the ending, and the rest seems all different too. "perfect and peculiar us" is very nice.
This isn't very well written, but maybe I couldn't do better in your circumstance.
Yes, that's what she is saying, and no doubt appreciates your encouraging 10.
And just how do you reconcile a 10 vote with a comment like that?
Your poeme is a colossal downpour of sick.
Acrusted
Being a bit of a lad, this poeme is utterly wasted on me. For fear of tainting the ballot with my ignorance, I shall vote inconspicuously -4-
Thanks.
toilet
Oh, I hate these confusions. Would you please just be forthright. You spelled it due, so there must be something I owe you.
The death penalty would provide Disneyland with greater realism, a more life-like experience. And failure to flush is a good place to start. It's a more serious offense than say, riding a bicycle in a bike lane while a mother with her pre-school child turns right without looking.
Several meaning on the due. It could refer to her blood lining the grass like dew. Or it could refer to orgasmic body fluids. All depends on your perspective and how you interpert it.