Uncover their mounds?

you fool. go get him.

How delightfully aloof you must be!

"Game Over" Good-est.

Good Christ; what a flat warm beer that was.

God...Long, boring and crammed full of angel cocca.

'moments of pregnant opportunity/back into reality,/ seeding it with new possibility' Is juvenile. The words are clearly there to force rhyme. Noeone going for precision would possibly pick such vague words as reality, possibility and opportunity. It is just too trite, you are trying to make huge generalisation out of nothing. Romp is also a clear forced rhyme for swamp. 'and death was born,/ while pain and love/ were only shadows in the dawn.' tries to be TS Eliot but sounds more like fred elliot. Again imprecise and hence meaningless. 'of those who have no goals,/and pay each day anew the cost,/ for this and senseless dreams.' again vague sweeping generalisations. This pattern seem to repeat itself through your poem like a rhyme.

I believe this describes Renee as well.You must really like Isadora eh? Emotions tamed in words where spirits can't be trapped.

Didn't get lost but shorter might be better.

Well thought-out and competently written. -8-

Good poem about your feelings toward Renee. Last verse really says it.

Renee Blue Eyes. It's simple yet i fell that the words used were adequate in this instance. I think i particularly liked the first two and the last two lines. Well written, an acrostic that evokes emotion. But next time round, maybe you would like to stress upon certain lines. Good Work, an 8 over 10. And i did another one, review if you have the time.