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on Ayudame (Help Me) by | Broken |
27 Jun 2004, 7:02 AM
Why on earth are you saying 'ayudame' instead of 'help me' or even 'tolong saya'?
Is it because, since you don't speak Spanish very well, 'ayudame' sounds deep and kind of beautiful, while the English and Malay versions sound bland and vaguely adolescent?
a number of grammatical errors and spelling mistakes..
maybe after you edit this and write something better.. i might just change my mind about my vote
conjured a pretty picture when i read it..
first line of second stanza.. i think it shld be 'lied to'...
but as i said before... i like it...
agree with shin shuu tt the use of said word made it better...
hey.. thanx dudette..
trod on oh whispering vitalist. nine.
the use of Ayudame is the best part of this; elevates it.
Yar i liken diz I hope you wor a condome?
kum und sit on my sofer let ust talk about diz
2 limerickes a day should maken you feel mutch better!
Gut limerick Zodiac! Wright one a day.this will maken you feel
mutch better!
It's good .. thumbs up! ... You managed to make others
feel your emotions and you explained the poem well.
Considering the fact that you got the inspiration
of writing this piece from 'In the Forest Of The Night'.. I admire that .. I like it a lot and thanks
for writing it in my book ... Heheh. (",@)
My recent poem. Can't seem to remember where I
get the inspiration from though. The 2nd
and last stanza sucks .... I know. (",*)
Erm ... What's that?
Haha ...okay maybe you're right.
I'm making excuses ... but thanks ..
Why did you stop being nowhereman?
"distant whelm" very nice.
quite nice bits here read again. hope don't seem ignore those when much smothered three letter crap words.
version without them your viewing, tell don't like.