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replying on Niggers Don't Write Poetry by pain killer
26 Jun 2004, 9:45 PM
All of these accusations and more have already been leveled at Jeremi dozens of times, to no great effect. His usual response, 'I'm the Supergay Ultrachrist', never fails to baffle us right off our divans.
Maybe the feature song of a sitcom-style broadway play written by a gay Edgar Poe...but other than that, quite normal, if not abnormal. Wait! Oh. *8.1*
Thank you
I have to admit I thought the same thing.
I'm Miguel
when to lovers treat eachother in a kind loving way with tenderness and respect. This is the rain, otherwise life's barren region grows hot.
In spite of a dozen or more spelling and grammar problems, I think I got the point.
The rare rain is a good metaphor for something, and nicely described, but I'm loseing what it is. And who is Miguel Antonio Francis?
2 spelling errors take away from it: consciouseness, akward.
fine otherwise.
"distant whelm" is very nice.
quite a few nice bits in here as I read it again. I hope I don't seem to ignore those when I say much of it is smothered by one, two and three letter crap words.
Try a version without them for your own viewing, tell me if you don't like it.
Fair affirmation pain killer, we'll accept your rendition.
Your much more plausible than the homophobic mixture of M&M and Greg Brady called horus8 or jerimi handjobolis or Indiana Jones and the fucking temple of nice hotel rooms.jerimi is so suburban he makes my great uncle from Topeka look ghetto.Jerimi if I ever see you in my neighborhood I'll kick you to sleep!I'll give you my address if you feel the need, you wished for fish story of lower- middle class America!Your a complete and utter fraud,you know as much about poverty and death as I know of gated developments and Orange County,CA.You and your dad in a high speed chase,yeah right...a high speed chase to the Target to get your mom some tampons you fuckin' poser!Please stop posting your puerile attempts at urban poetry on scarce web space you arcadian jackass.
The gene pun is horrible, DRP - I just can't get past that.
You may very well be saying some profundity - but if so, you have a clown nose on while doing it.
hi hbh, if that's your real name.
This does express the description of fear - but I'm always more comfortable with a poem that expresses fear itself.
How do you feel when you feel afraid? Describe some of that abuse - use some poetic devices, paint a picture.
Make me feel it without telling me what to feel?
Can you do that?
well i like this poem a lot so ho hum