<{Baba^Yaga}>
on Last Ride by KnightofMidkemia
28 May 2004, 11:51 AM
Preperation H
Just fuck her and get it over with, you'll feel much better, and in the end? They only bring us here, they don't have any answers, trust me.
I spent my entire life thinking I had to fix my parents, and about ten minutes burying them both.
some people spend their entire lives in reverse and denial dude, just fucking looking for trouble.
When it gets right down to it some parents are helpful and an asset, and some our mere shit, and a liability, and... We all know what good dead weight is? Amputate that shit with a red hot spatula, and get on with your life.
(I had to throw that in since today was the first day I ever sat down and split my pants in the ass.)
And he would know because he's the Cardinal Of Cornucopia.
Where do fat people live?
Rotunda.
Thank you folks, I'm here twice a day.
One of those where I'm not exactly sure what is being said, but I listen intently and am thankful for the conversation.
Nicely painted.
I never thought about that. I guess I do use "it/its" too much.
at first the numerous "it/its" gave me pause - but with that ending - sets it up very nicely indeed.
eh... it has nothing to do with deep meanings, i got bored during school and wrote it in 3 days in a free hour i had... i (along with a friend) later wrote a prequel story to it for a class project
oh, and things can be "dulled" without be "non-sharp"
it was good...gave me goosebumps
It is? I should have known. You're so smart.
You posted this on my 30th birthday and very fitting it seems.
If you experienced some massive head wound, causing your capacity for thought to become moderately impaired, do you suppose you would believe MORE in God, or LESS? Thanks -
Curious in Schenectady, NY
Isn't the 'folded way' only one of many ways that her eyes cave? How many ways can one's eyes cave that can be described as 'folded'?
"I figure voicing my curiousity is a needed urge"
Your mouth is a cornucopia of plums.
I can tell that I'm being ignored. You haven't even ridiculed me for my question, not even a reply with a elongated and false translation to make me the punchline of a joke. Not even a blasted "bow'ls".
Have I done something to deserve being tagged as an invisible and horribly grotesque untouchable? I have a gut feeling that I won't get a reply to my question wrapped in childish whining. But anyway, I figure voicing my curiousity is a needed urge, the side-effect of some dismal disease that I endure daily.
Something about this poem bothers me.. I'm not sure why either... which is why I shall refrain from voting.
No, you're right -- you know me, first drafts are always B+.
The art of proper grammar is still foreign to me, but I'm slightly improving.
One of your best in a while.
"Wheel chair knight of no table" needs work. I get it now, and would've had an easier time if you'd made wheelchair one word. Maybe hyphenate "knight-of-no-table" as well. Maybe not.
Have you ever read this poem out loud?
Practically every single line of this is wrong.
Not surprising, considering your source.