zodiac
on The Folded Ways Your Eyes Cave by horus8
26 May 2004, 9:25 AM
Maybe you could do something like,
"If you thought I was going to beg, to crave
You, guess again, because I cannot stand..."
And I like "way" better than "ways".
The only part of this that isn't ace is "to beg and crave". No, I don't know how to fix it.
Or a symbol of any heterosexual inclinations remaining in his twisted homo soul.
re: "I don't see how translating something makes it yours."
It's simple. Suppose we represent a good poem with 1 and a not-so-good poem with 0. This gives us
Lorca's poem = 1,
Sasha's version = 0
For Sasha's version to still be Lorca's poem and not its own, discrete dribbling, you'd have to except 1 = 0 - which is quite a hefty plum to get your mouth around.
Nope.
This does not say that my life has failed, and the baby is not mine-but thanks for reading closely and paying attention!
S4 L5 "He renews her and soothes my volatile heart" The mother and I are different people.
It's not a limerick:
AABBA
Just a rhyme:
ABCCB
But thanks a lot anyway
*CUAO*
It says,"see you around" Ha!
Your persistent use of the limerick to write on non-limerick (i.e., non lewd or funny) themes will be your enduring contribution to literature. Cherish it, my friend.
Pshaw.
Nicholas Jones
replying on Lovely as a Lapland Night: Sort of a Sonnet by Nicholas Jones
26 May 2004, 6:50 AM
Well, it's certainly a pseudo-sonnet. I'm glad you like the colon thing, it's supposed to be slightly scientific and technical. Don't ask me what the title means though.
Shuushin
replying on Lovely as a Lapland Night: Sort of a Sonnet by Nicholas Jones
26 May 2004, 6:48 AM
Agreed, one could argue it. Certain specific types of sonnets require consistent rising and falling rythm over ten beats - but not all.
I've warmed up on the colon use, gives it a nice flavor. Good one.
Nicholas Jones
replying on Lovely as a Lapland Night: Sort of a Sonnet by Nicholas Jones
26 May 2004, 6:32 AM
You could argue it's not quite a sonnet because the now: and so: things often add extra stresses to the lines, which aren't always proper iambic pentameters.
I like the use of the colon. It suggests a sense of cause and effect, and messes about with the rhythm.
That's right! Your life has utterly failed, so why not produce another miniature failure in an unbelievably misguided attempt to fix it? 10!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ugh...
My mother's mother is from Colombia, but of Spanish Decent, and Basque. My father's father is from Greece, Thrace to be exact, and my mother's father is a german hugonaut. he started the first airlines in South America, but he was no astronaut.
So what in the name of all holy things are you doing here on my lowly page?
I wouldn't have had the idea of its political ties unless you gave it to me. Thanks.
Zodiac's going to have a fieldday with this page I can feel it already
Perhaps it does have political ties.
There's another poem Lorca wrote under the same title (Canción del Jinete) with the subtitle of "Córdoba" which is more specific, the last stanza of which is:
¡Ay que camino tan lango!
¡Ay mi jaca valerosa!
¡Ay que la muerte me espera!
Antes de llegar a Córdoba.
(Oh the road so long before me/ Oh my brave and sable pony/ Oh, for death is waiting for me/ Long before I get to Córdoba)
Considering that Lorca was an Andalusian poet, it may have had some political significance, though I am unsure of to what extent or of what nature.
I see, so it was nothing political about the times? Or does that tie into it too?