Shuushin
on Washing-up Hands and Disgruntled Underarms by fevriere
14 May 2004, 2:06 PM
did you mean "hart" is in a male [red] deer?
quite nice, though maybe a few too many "is"s and "was"s
liking the title.
edpeterson
on The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
14 May 2004, 1:36 PM
best poem i ever read -0-
Brilliant so true 10
this is a prime example of somone who dosent have a clue about
poem wrighting and conpleatly no imadgination
This went completely over my head.
Here's a nine because I could never picture a snake with breasts, no matter how hard I tried - until now. Thank you.
oh gee im so upset. NOT
senryu what sort of stupid word is that?
Your new so I'll excuse you this time, if you want to join in with a message string, use the link in the bottom right corner of the comment box marked "reply"
Also, that was all my own, completely original. Ideas were not taken from any other book, let alone a religious text.
Honest.
Painful and hell only rhyme when Dante is turning over in his grave to the tune of Robert Pinsky's consonantal clip-clop crap.
Now, about the poem. Wait, it's not a poem.
If I have to read the words
life and knife just one more time
Then I'll go into convulsions
More than at this very rhyme
I'm not sure where from but the word plagiarism rings a bell; for something which is more serious than a made up poem.
What in the name of......
I suppose this fits into the category of bad ascii art. I'm not sure though.
No matter how I read this, sideways, diagonally, top to bottom, bottom to top, circularly, or after after a few shots of smirnov, this still doesen't make much more sense than the pimple on my bum.
Maybe a few BableFish iterations will improve it.
beneathednessified makes me think of a cross between George Bush on a saturday night after seven beers, and e.e. cummings on a very bad day
By the way, this section of holy scripture is taken from "The Boble", In The Beginning 2:1. This holy text will be available when I get around to writing it.
and take some prozac while you're at it
How touching. It makes me want to cry tears of suffocation at the rhyme heart/apart. Then I'll die.
one day we will meet again best friends me and you would be better off with two commas as you can see lack of punctuation makes one sound either like a non-anglophone frenchman reading the King James Bible or like a a somnambulant George Bush.
Here's a -4- to take the pain away
You don't know your scripture do you.
"And the great Lord Bob smiled down benevolently at his creations and said 'Many will tell you that the world was created in six days and that God rested on the seventh, yet this is not so. I created this world in five days and in as many shall it be destroyed. On the first four days the four horsemen (who will be correctly chronicled) shall rain destruction and fear and on the fifth, I myself shall descend to the world and either save the world or destroy it as I fit. The beginning of the end I promise to be on a Monday, as this is the day more dreaded than any other. I choose Monday also because I thus guarantee that my weekend will not be ruined by a host of the Heavens that requires guidance or reining in."
As you can see, this shows that Bob has thought of everything and that the weekend has not been forgotten.
Enkidu
replying on The Plea of the Beneathednessified (New poetry scheme!) by Enkidu
14 May 2004, 11:45 AM
Oh, Ms. Allonby, all riled up and no place to go.
Big words from such a tiny mind.
If I had your motivation I'd take up a permanent residence at the Neverland Ranch
It's just poetry, you ignorant slut.
What about the gay snakes? you left out the gay snakes!
sliver
on The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
14 May 2004, 11:39 AM
I actually liked reading this one, Somebody shoot me!