Shuushin
on Thaw by <~>
21 Apr 2004, 2:09 PM
I like swollen and welling together.
7) You said flash fiction twice.
8) And so what? Anyone can make decent-looking flash fiction. Here's one of mine: http://tinyurl.com/3dof7.
9) Too = adverb; To = preposition. Don't need an agent to figure that one out.
10) "Reading your comments is like listening to Elton John whistling Crocodile Rock through his toothgap while fellating me, Simon Cowell" - Simon Cowell.
11) I've decided you need a lesson. What say you to a spanking for every year of your naughty misspent life? Ready?...
Great comment.
You're gay.
beautiful and sad.
It was while drunk on tequila, nincompoop. Thanks for the 5!
blah blah blah
1) Everyone knows who Francis Coppola is; he's a famous recluse who designs improbable gigantic flying machines.
2) Zoetrope's website (all-STORY.com) describes itself thusly: "In 1997, Francis Ford Coppola launched a magazine devoted to supporting the brightest young voices in fiction. In its short history, Zoetrope: All-Story has received every major short fiction award, including the National Magazine Award for Fiction..." Are you noticing the repetition of certain words? I am.
3) NFG is a crock. Even nentwined says so.
4) Ask yourself this question: Why in GOD'S NAME would an agent frequent a hack internet open-style poetry site when they've each got THOUSANDS UPON FUCKING THOUSANDS of hack budding poets breaking down their doors already, without having had to exert ANY EFFORT on their own parts?
5) Wait, here's another: Do you really believe having a 'literary agent' means shit? (A clue: No.)
6) Before you answer, let me point out the obvious to you: you don't have an agent yourself. In fact, aside from your knowledge of three online publications (one of which isn't a poetry publication) you don't know squat about the business of publishing poetry. That is all. You may be seated.
this souns like something you wrote while on drugs.
Zodiac, you are such a nitwit. Zoetrope is Francis Ford Coppolas (you probably have no idea who he is) on-line workshop for screenplays, flash fiction, poetry, flash fiction on and on. And as a matter of fact you smug child, I have been published several times, ever heard of NFG? didn't think so. grow up stop being such a little arse. And you are a fool if you don't think agents freqent these sites, obviously you are not a serious writer, just a poser.
please don't use IM language in poetry... "ur" made me cringe
what happened to 5-7-5? 4-7-6 is new to me...
poems are not a good medium for political views... at least in my humble opinion...
No comment. (or vote)
"Furtive" alone makes this poem fly. I'm impressed by your ability to capture the moment. *8*
I would have liked to see the first line of the third stanza follow you other lines, and "totally" is a pretty weak word . I DO like the originality of "dream den's door", maybe it's the alliteration.
Really a poem true to the poet. I do believe that ellipses would have served the purpse better than colons, but all in all a solid testimony. *9*
Sure, I'll buy that.
Stayed fairly iambic too - Sasha will still bitch (cuz he want to be your).
I think the couplets keep the thing from flowing; it reads list-like.
It's worth fixing.