Bobjim
replying on Poetry in action by Bobjim
22 Mar 2004, 8:47 AM
That's scarily similar to the first version. But I decided to actually use this on someone, so I modified it a bit.
10.
What do you mean "senseless"? Surely if someone cares enough to kill you they must be very sensitive.
Unless it's Dark Angel. Insensitive bastard.
What if 'yourself' is a Hitler-esque dictator, convinced that the Jews should be killed?
Oh go on.
-5-
Consider the lily.
Invigorated spandangled horsemonkey
You know, alcohol works just as well.
There lives near the home of this dude
A girl who I've never seen nude
Her dress sense is blessed
But I wish she'd wear less
Right, fuck this, I'm off for some food
Cheerio old boy
poemwanker
on Untitled *involves taking pills and cutting with razors* by AskittlesK
22 Mar 2004, 7:49 AM
I'm sizzling as I get busy.
Sitting on the hob is the chip pan
O! Why did I seat
My flammable rear
At such an inopportune time?
-7-
poemwanker
replying on Untitled *involves taking pills and cutting with razors* by AskittlesK
22 Mar 2004, 7:46 AM
Razors and pills are so boring though...try tnt, liven the decor up a bit.
18 next April, but check out some of my other work for maturity.
AskittlesK
replying on Untitled *involves taking pills and cutting with razors* by AskittlesK
21 Mar 2004, 7:39 PM
thank you
AskittlesK
replying on Untitled *involves taking pills and cutting with razors* by AskittlesK
21 Mar 2004, 7:38 PM
thank you
I'll give this a 10 if you send me a tape recording of yourself reading it in a deep wizardy voice.
wilco
on Untitled *involves taking pills and cutting with razors* by AskittlesK
21 Mar 2004, 4:36 PM
I sincerely hope that you're not really cutting yourself....but if you are then I would like to make the suggestion (perhaps unwanted) that you see your doctor about getting some antidepressants that ARE yours. I did like your poem though, by the way.
some deleted user
on Untitled *involves taking pills and cutting with razors* by AskittlesK
21 Mar 2004, 4:26 PM
A bit melodramatic, but I can feel it.
The whole affair seem pretty much like this sometimes. Good rhythm. You put the feeling accross; that's what I like.
AskittlesK
replying on Untitled *involves taking pills and cutting with razors* by AskittlesK
21 Mar 2004, 3:59 PM
o thats alright... i cut myself on and off...sometimes...mostly just for about a year now..
Yeah this poem relates to that and i got suspended like a little less than 2 weeks ago for taking a perscription antidepressant that wasn't mine. And that day when I came home being suspended and it was kind of late and i cut my self and it started bleeding and everything then i just dabbed it on paper. Then I have a feeling I passed out on my bed.. cuz i don't remember falling asleep but i remember waking up. I'm not sure what exactly happended.. But yeah now I'm going to a chemical counsular at school *cuz i have too* .. its a really long story.. but like 20 people got caught with perscription pills that weren't theres. And well since i have to see the chemical counsular for 30 min during 1st per. I think she might then find out that i cut. idk tho
yeah i like poemranker too and other poem sites!
well g2g
-Angie
Well done Jeremi! Your poetry is really coming along now.
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
on Untitled *involves taking pills and cutting with razors* by AskittlesK
21 Mar 2004, 3:43 PM
I'm sorry I was mean to you before. I guess we're pretty similar really. I've been cutting myself for three years how about you? I guess I like the feeling of power it gives me. I only wish others could see the pain inside. That's why I like poemranker people really understand here. Tell us your heart. xx
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