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Shuushin on Causation by fevriere 10 Mar 2004, 7:35 AM

Is not too bad, really. I hesitate slightly at some of the rhymes (arrive and alive) in particular and a couple grammar issues (...essay fast - fast wants to be an adverb and is not) - and I'm usually pretty easy going with that kind of thing in poetry. It does a nice job at conveying the loss

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. on Causation by fevriere 10 Mar 2004, 6:25 AM

I'm miles from home, I'm hurting, I'm in a cafe, and I write. I write.

some deleted user on Aesgntor by MacFrantic 10 Mar 2004, 5:45 AM

i like the rhyme

some deleted user on target by butterflymist 10 Mar 2004, 5:44 AM

nice rhyme

Blindpoetry replying on âIâll Drop You Off At The Next Cornerâ by Blindpoetry 9 Mar 2004, 7:41 PM

It is supposed to be weird and awkward. Thats the whole point. One of the ways. (one... but there are many other ways that this could get to you.. bleh) ... one of the ways to make this get to you is to make you feel like you've read a piece 'o shit. And thats how the speaker feels. He feels awkward.. he feels stupid... he feels unreliable.. I don't know how to explain, but.. en, that was intended - and not many people are getting this at all. 0_o; Hm... I wonder if my words made any sense...?

Shuushin replying on Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT 9 Mar 2004, 7:41 PM

hey - thanks.

ga_writer replying on *-UNTITLED*- by ga_writer 9 Mar 2004, 2:29 PM

i don't get what you're trying to say.. i don't take 12 weeks to write anything. i just write what comes to me. i guess there's always room for improvement

ga_writer replying on *-UNTITLED*- by ga_writer 9 Mar 2004, 2:27 PM

i don't understand what u mean?? i'll take all the help i can get

wilco replying on The Cessation of Fidelity by wilco 9 Mar 2004, 2:03 PM

Are they good? They look kind of like morticians...

zodiac replying on The Cessation of Fidelity by wilco 9 Mar 2004, 1:55 PM

http://www.evanescencewebsite.com/homeenglish.htm

zodiac on Brethren by richa 9 Mar 2004, 1:53 PM

'clock:' - with a colon. I like 'like girls' - without 'the'. I don't get the punctuation in the last line.

zodiac replying on To sow and reap by somemorepoetry 9 Mar 2004, 1:49 PM

I think it's a great one! Next, you'll want to do the same thing with more original rhyming sounds. Still, good start!

wilco replying on The Cessation of Fidelity by wilco 9 Mar 2004, 1:48 PM

Who?

zodiac on The Cessation of Fidelity by wilco 9 Mar 2004, 1:47 PM

Do you think _Evanescence_ is the best band ever?

BrandonW on I want to sleep by butterflymist 9 Mar 2004, 1:33 PM

If there was a general direction in which the poem was supposed to be flowing, I could not find it. I'd like to see it rewritten in a less drousy state.

butterflymist on *-UNTITLED*- by ga_writer 9 Mar 2004, 1:15 PM

brandon w is right it is way to juvenile not that it sucks it is very goooooooooood but it needs to flow

butterflymist on I want to sleep by butterflymist 9 Mar 2004, 1:01 PM

I was overly tired when I wrote this poem and pushing myself for others amusement take what you want of it and leave the rest

wilco replying on The Cessation of Fidelity by wilco 9 Mar 2004, 12:50 PM

Then why did you give it a 10?

fuzzylogicisatwat on The Cessation of Fidelity by wilco 9 Mar 2004, 12:42 PM

This poem, as a handbag half full of sick, should be politely discarded.

BrandonW on The Cessation of Fidelity by wilco 9 Mar 2004, 11:30 AM

Oh, how we can all say the same thing in so many ways - been there - love it!