fevriere
replying on The Blues by fevriere
14 Feb 2004, 2:43 PM
No shame in that.
It's very good I think. Very good. Poems like this are a bit dense for my personal taste. I mean for reading.
When I do read it, I picture it more as a spoken piece. I think it would be great for that.
Is English your first language?
No, Alabama.
To Vietnam?
such clever critique you make for me. How's that working out for you?
such clever critique you make for me. How's that working out for you?
witty how it stops at the end
nice write
if you lose the exclamation at the end it will have more impact i
i love anything on a bus nice write
i love anything on a bus nice write
It's a lovely sentiment.
I like the writing of the first part better than the second part.
Finally, I can't avoid the logical bump that you are wishing the person you speak of dead before you though. ;-)
Which just leaves me with this crystalization... I love you and I want you dead. ;-)
No offense I hope. I really enjoy so much of it.
The words pure and Alabama do not strike me as particularly sexy. I'll give you a buffalo-head nickel if you've ever been there.
I wouldn't say connoisseur, no. But I like porn as much as the next guy.
Is that because you're a connoisseur of pure Alabama blacksnake?
Of course this is great. I was told yesterday by a professor that Pound's "At a station of the Metro" is one of the most-interpreted poems ever. May this one have such a long and heavily-anthologized life.
The word black followed by the word snake is so sexy to me.
Good-B------- is one of the silliest things done in poetry ever ever ever ever ever ever ever. I imagine you performing this, accompanying yourself with a dramatic reenactment. It would be fucking hilarious.
"If when"?
I don't understand what is meant by your instructions. By mixing FEELINGS I only get EEFLINGS or SNIGFLEE, neither of which inspires anything in me. And (this just in passing) are you fucking daft?!