i understand better. ...I can write a dedent sentence. I've written a few short stories, and I think two are in my website. According to everyone who read them, they were good! ...so why not take a shot at poetry? ...if I quit posting, how do i know what to work on? Yes, I can read other "good" poetry, but I can post see my hurts at the same time.

No, listen. The reason your poetry doesn't work isn't because it "sounds like a novel". It's not because you don't have the right feelings. It's nothing to do with feelings. It's because you don't put together words in any kind of pleasing way. You just mash them together in a melodramatic soup. "Without meaning, what is poetry?" Poetry, as I said, is the "art of language". What painting is to brush strokes, poetry is to words. If you don't know how to use a paintbrush, you can't paint, no matter what sort of feelings you might have. If you don't know how to use words and how to fit them together, you can't write poetry, no matter what sort of feelings you might have. Imagine if someone who had never tried to paint before showed you a terrible, incompetent painting and asked you for your honest opinion. Because you're being honest, you tell them it's ugly. "But it comes from the heart!" they say. "How can it be ugly? All you care about is how it looks!" Their reply is absurd, because painting isn't a competition to see who can have the best feelings, or who can draw the most "meaningful" picture. It has elements of that, but painting is painting because you paint. You have to have mastery of painting before you can express anything with it effectively. You don't need feelings to paint well. It might be that you feelings to paint an artistic masterpiece, but before that you need to know how to paint. Similarly: You don't need feelings to write poetry well. It might be that you need feelings to write a poetic masterpiece, but before that you need to know how to write. You need to have a mastery of English and the sound of language before you can effectively express feelings with poetry. You might not like it, but that's the way it is. If you want to improve your writing, stop writing poetry and start writing prose. Read constantly. When you can write a decent sentence, then maybe you can start on poetry. P.S. I say "fuck" a lot because "fuck" is an ace word.

Whats wrong with being an "agnsty" teenager? Being an Angsty Teenager, atleast, gives you a poetic feel in life - good or bad...

....Your words hurt me... ...I am not trying to accomplish entertaining anyone except myself and whoever it is for... I simply post so I could get critisized and work on what is hurting my poetry. Obviously, its clear you hate it because it sounds like a novel? or it just sucks to no end? ... and i was half-way joking - and you are partially right. But without meaning, what is poetry? just some little MEANINGLESS talent you have? .. something that you write that doesn't express any of your feelings? You just care about how it is written and how it sounds? True, you do need good grammar, but you also need feelings. without feelings, it is meaningless. Why start a fight? Why say fuck a million times to act tough against me? I'm only 13, trying to improve my writing so I can give them to my love, or keep in my secret stash of "feelings"... ...why say thanks? I'm going to keep posting.

What's "amazing" about it, Captain Gush? Nobody ever says "seized" out loud. When you write "seized" everyone knows you're an angsty teenager trying to write dramatic, soul-searching explorations of pain and beauty, or some shit like that. A shoe can write better than WithoutLife.

No they don't, you cretin. Editors are supposed to catch the odd mistake, not systematically correct every word because the author is too duncely to spell. The first refuge of the moron with an inflated idea of their own "creativity" is to claim that spelling, punctuation and grammar are irrelevant to writing poetry. You think there is some beautiful, deep spiritual feeling in your soul which you express to create poetry. You are wrong. Poetry is not "the expression of my feelings in words". "Creativity" is for weaving a sausage cosy for your mother in arts & crafts class. It means dick in poetry. Poetry is knowing how to fucking use language. Great poets aren't great because they express their fucking feelings. They're great because of their incredible command of English. If you can't spell, you can't write good English, and if you don't know how to write good English, how the fuck do you think you'll be able to write poetry? It's like saying you want to be a sculptor, but you don't want to go through the difficult work of learning how to chisel. If you were a sculptor you'd create a marble abominations that looked like a mauled hunchback, but you'd think it was beautiful because it expressed your love for best friend. What you're writing isn't poetry. It's guff. You can't write a pleasant-sounding sentence to save your life. Read your work out loud. It's absurd. "Your tears blind you You cannot see" Who the fuck are you trying to kid? You're not in a fantasy novel. People who know how to write don't write like that, because it sounds like a retard being crushed by a bulldozer. In conclusion, stop posting. Thanks!