horus8
replying on "I post here cause I have a lot of readers" by Bachus
28 Nov 2003, 1:35 PM
Das Bumm Police.
lol. Indeed, as will your relationship with the house cleaner.
I never said I didn't. I just said you were crazy, but in a good way.
careful, you might be making yourself look a little silly.
i have those feeling too ... i can communcate w/ that
wow thats awsome ..
The lyrics themselves are good, but the la la las, and the na na nas, arnt very necassary. Otherwise good job - 10
toad has a wrist boyo. That he does, but no watch:o)
Grate title? Definately.
First ones the best, and a nature theme, I mean what could be more natural?
Who smokes meth again? Just making sure you know.
Whats strange? it makes sense to me, somehow.. love it-utterly enamored by its twisted alienism. Actually? I'm fucking jealouse. But anyone who's anyone knows that.
Ten on turkeef. Spuna smells- and my nigger cat liked it.
We do not know whether death is a curse or a blessing since it is the permanent discontinuation of life, thus we can neither have experienced it nor recieved second hand evidence of it. All we can assume is that it offers freedom from the spatial world whether it be in the form of a disembodied mind or complete nothingness. Is not even nothingness a form of freedom from the world of substance?
Hrmm.. well, I will have to restrain myself from tweaking it another 300 times.
Mr. Haiku doesn't allow much room for blabbering- but he did allow two extra haiku's this time, since we are dealing with virgins... and they do need to get laid.
Oh, and this is dedicated to McFan.
really???? ah. I got an answer!
Heres a 2.
Well shucks.. this write up got almost straight tens!?
you guys, I can never be angry long- ya'll soon brighten up my day always.
One of these days one of me pieces will get 6 average.. i feel it coming closer.. so elusive damnit. hope it isn't on this one though lol- that would be too ironic.
such things do boggle the mind.
Well, I wish I had the energy to experience that pain.
it started with the title, it sprung into my mind all of a sudden late at night- dont fuck with mr haiku- then I thought
"hrmm, haiku like a punker in the mosh pit? smashin."
though, i was worried about it having been done before, but so far it seems im original & sparkin up my own twist on haiku.
thank you for the comment and grade- need it since ive only just started doin these, and I just know 575- say something clever/reflective.
its not easy as a street poet. ;/
You know man, Salvation isn't easy. I hope you have the strength to hold on, it's a rough ride, and everyone seems to want to pull you off.
I thought modern haiku's more flexible? then again- poets these days break more rules, think I'll do some research on the haiku.
senryu... someone give me a link for all poetic forms, been cravin a big crash course- and would love to know my options.