Shuushin
on Hurt never dies by hobojo
8 Nov 2003, 6:09 AM
I kept trying to figure if you have a bible reference in here (since you have synoptic) - but I gave up, sorry. Do you?
Searching for meaning (I've put in as much as can be expected).
an unborn child talking to its mother before some fatalistic decision? Intriguing - and I like the voice.
I loved the dark melodrama of this piece. I give you a 9...
Let me help you comprehend what i meant by PERSONAL writes, since you seem to be too slow to catch my drift:
I don't wish to discuss my posts concerning childhood memories of my mother/father with you- you can bother me with your inane slandering on my other poetry to your hearts desire. Simply put, I don't want to debate about whether my memories are "guff" or not, specially since you commented such just to prey on a touchy post of mine.
Oh, and repeatedly saying im stupid and a failure will never have the effect your aiming for darkie- nor will it make such comments fact. Your Monumentally Obsessed, over me.. and was it not you who boasted about me becoming to emotionaly captured over yourself? Its amazing how things actually turn out.
And I've done MUCH more than just ramble on with you over the little arguements you bring up- your not the center of my poemranker universe.
Do something dwith this. A sonnet, 4 quatrains...
Go for 8 syllables per line. Good story. Bumpy rhyme.
Do what it deserves.
This sounds like a flip on something that goes on in another culture.
No- I've been informed by the legion of dunces that you happen to have that title. It was stated in a letter complaining about my purported membership and rank, threatening to discredit my status of dunce and all that.. which really amused me, its odd for idiots be so formal and... well, polite in such a pointless letter.
Toodles
He's making fun of my previous poem.
Hey, not bad! - that last line though felt one beat too heavy; a slight nit.
"children of scorn" was cute - made me think of children of the corn (natch).
Stylistically the yoderian reversal of "liquored were", and "fuddled were" works out since it's consistent in two stanzas - that I can handle. Sometimes it's overdone (no probs here).
the quotes are because my Psychic Tophet post is REALLY FUCKING LONG - more of a story than a poem.. though its written in poetic verse, and goes into some detail about my childhood experience with my mother.
Rose tears just happens to be the one of my few good memories of her- visiting her in belgium after having not spoken to her in 3 years after my father divorced her. I figured she deserved to have one of the few good moments posted- since everything else I've written concerning her isnt at all flattering.
I'm guessing that means, "yes" (you meant to leave it off)
SupremeDreamer
replying on EarthWaterAir - Hey! Look! IM MR FIRE! by Y2kSlamPoet
8 Nov 2003, 4:42 AM
clerical you mean?
SupremeDreamer
replying on EarthWaterAir - Hey! Look! IM MR FIRE! by Y2kSlamPoet
8 Nov 2003, 4:41 AM
Ah, claimed? I thought I lied, or thats what you said.
Btw, I have a certificate myself- somewhere in the garbage heap that I call a duplex. It seems that you believe yourself able to read my thoughts and even detect lies! Ofcourse, you've only used your lie detector when the subject has to do with IQ.
Oh, and you also reveal my thoughts magically when you want to dictate what I think. Quite impressive, but my Super Bullshit Detector says you really smell, and it left a side-note saying it also thinks your very sensitive about your IQ Rating compared to mine. You even had to deflect me from mentioning it, even though you do more commenting concerning intelligence than I do-
And if I remember correctly darkie, YOU WERE THE ONE WHO BROUGHT "IQ"'s UP IN THE FIRST PLACE. Which happens to be why I bothered to mention my IQ, along with my usual comic poke.
-Have A Nice Day.
SupremeDreamer
replying on EarthWaterAir - Hey! Look! IM MR FIRE! by Y2kSlamPoet
8 Nov 2003, 4:10 AM
Only on halloween and family reunions.
Fr the love of the lord...what in gods name is this.. A fucking what...
tought never escape fr my brain has claws..a rusty cage borded up with a chunk of glass... enough id say to keep them in as a green house wud...n i think....
i think...darn the thought is stuck n i hv lost the keys....So long:o)
id hate 2 see ya in the rest o the week - what wud u be doing i hate 2 ponder...But liked ya ideas of childish n simple methods fr suicide. It brings in a strong end of the stick called emotion into the pic..
super wud be a mockery, but good wud be fair:o)
I thought Italy is inclusive of everywhere, must be that i am wrong. If u ask a fool he wud nod n say this is great; since i am one myself i'd also nod n say u wanted 2 say more but u chose less. Just rem that anything that haunts is never short. Hence in the end i gota say its worth a 08max no more no less:o)
Thanx but 'whats there in a name' - long or short, wound or horned the guy in ref is, if he is:o)
u ref to my dick.. if so thanx:o)