eh http://www.mycgiserver.com/~prawne/code.jsp?action=decode&thecode=0114F480

Doesn't quite flow as smoothly as it could. It could be better.

I liked the last sentence, the rest has a little too much cliche to it

lol

Emotions are the fundamental building blocks that bind the spiritual, physical, mental and artistic realms. Without them, poetry and poverty become meaningless and are lost in the sands of time beneath the waves of hustle and bustle that break on the shores of our frantic modern lifestyles. I hope you agree with these sentiments, because I think your work sums them up beautifully. An excellent poeme. -10-

I love the way you've used an egg as a metaphor for life in general.

yep - he's a strange one. What is it with these chin grabbing poses!?

Pretentious guff.

genius -10-

big points for universal appeal, I think the cat would just run away though. (cuz I pictured it sitting on the tire) now if the second line was "against the alternator" . . . or someplace similar . . .

Nicely penned prose. Absotively. Would be a nice bit within a short story, I'm sure.

There is a new slant here that I find refreshing somehow - but I feel like there should be something more. Intesting language - yess..... interesting....

I second the honorable mr. mage's proposal - lets storm the castle!!

thanks for livening up the place.

I think it could be something, but it needs a hook, my friend - needs a hook. and that first line in the bridge - maybe a missing word in there; give it a read. lastly - the bridge was a bit soon for me. Maybe develop the hookline in that second bit and move the bridge down - just as a suggestion.

Satan fears nothing but my Ice scream.

13 views and no votes?! What are you people fucking BLIND! 10!

None of you are a match for this master of spoken stupidity. I have an off brown belt in martial farts.