Awesome easy rhyming kept my attention - right up to naevete', then it kind of breaks. Rethink that ending, if you are so inclined, and you will have something really special, I'm sure of it.

Remember, friends don't let friends use the wrong "to/two/too": 3rd stanza, "to" s/b "too". I knew you were dead by S5. Cute; have a 6.

Is that "E" for ecstasy? I liked your analogy.

sad. truly sad.

obviously he doesn't know how to use either one.

say more about the beautiful scars, why were they beautiful? did she move on?

pretty depressing.

Needs more line breaks, and needs more explanation about what's going on.

Cheers you guys its nice to have people on my side for once ("sniff") but i will now have to eat you all!

I read this with pain. 8.

knives 'drove' -> 'driven'? relatively interesting piece for an 'angst' poem. couldn't quite get into the flow.

"The sawed-off between his fesses." is interesting - is the implication he was shot in the chest? Never seen fesses used like that - works for me, though.

duh

gre8t

A hero you shall be on the little yellow bus indeed.

cute. :)

I know one

Each stanza needs to have more of a flow to the next.

Interesting.

Like the main idea of this poem. Some of the lines do not flow well enough with the rest.