And here was me thinking with a name like Pervy Elf and a title like Little girl there would be shenanigans on the way, and i was right wasn't I???/// This is quite quite quite quite quite quite beautiful. Thank you!

Folks stupid enough to get themselves into these whiny drama spirals unfortunately never cut themselves nearly deep enough.

Delius Smith whipping up a weekend treat!!!1819321 dsds mv, dskj

ACE Are you ACE as well?

Is "an 'ann summers'" a store? Distracting--why not just "here, where the windowfronts are blacked out in lingerie and leather"? This is good, though some of the diction is a little awkward. This has a nice poignancy.

Way too many extraneous details before getting to the meat of this. Why start in the car? Why all the workout details? In medias res.

[_] AABB rhyming scheme [_] About drugs [X] About romantic love [_] About writing [X] About suicide or self-mutilation [_] About the author's social pastimes [_] Arbitrary indentation [X] Arbitrary line breaks [X] Autobiographical but written in the third person [_] Clerical errors [_] Clichéd imagery (gazing out of window, tears falling like rain) [_] Clichéd rhymes (love/above, heart/apart) [X] Clichéd angst words (putrid, wretched) [X] Devoid of rhyme [X] Devoid of other linguistic embellishments (alliteration, onomatopoeia) [X] Devoid of other literary devices (simile, synaesthesia) [X] Devoid of wondrous or fantastical imagery [_] Ellipses used overabundantly [_] Insipidly whimsical or zany [_] Internet shorthand or emoticons [_] Leaving rant [_] Lower case only [_] 'Lyrics' [X] Melodramatic [_] Naively religious or superstitious [_] Obsessed with femininity [_] Pointedly unanswered questions [_] Rage against the machine [_] Repetition of a word or phrase to the point of nausea [_] Sanctimonious [X] Self-obsessed [_] Sentimental [_] Smugly-named protagonist [_] Thesaurophilia [_] Untitled [_] Vicarious wish fulfilment

Demonstrating such a wide understanding of different cultures

I liked this poem because it is so sensative.

Kudos to you, you have the blue 1/10 before you even have the good marks this poem deserves.

ok the go ahead little girl sets a very creepy tone. You seem to switch from concerned (kind of) to the abuser 'blame everyone except yourself' though and it tales off a bit at the end could be snappier.

pretty enough, well put together. Not sure there is much in the way of insight to grab the writer though

Well put together and all that but this seems too political. There is no emotion, the best war poem line I have read is ' red lips are not so red/ as the stained stones kissed/ by the english dead- wilfred owen. Because it communicated something, is apolitical. This is a bit too dogmatic Well hung together though

A work of breathtaking vision

Some people just don't know talent when they read it. All hail the great nostrill rocketeer. All hail Discordia! 9