DreamerSupreme
replying on Shakespearean Sonnets & Poets by Y2kSlamPoet
20 Sep 2003, 10:32 PM
if i were to compare myself to shakespear
then i would really be an imbecile
deluded and blindly walking
its not possible to compare a beastly alien
to a skull pond'ring idiot of the old
x-mass decor and resurrected forgeries
and why the fuck do you waste time with such stupid curiosities?? it makes you look like old age finally turned your mind unsound, voiced with senile utterings.
ridiculous. christian.
Jesus died for you.
If you were to compare yourself to Shakespeare, what would you say?
i wasnt comparing him to me, or anyone.
i simply voicing my dislike of his works, and dont get all ass-sore about it.
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I spoke of picasso with snakes tongue and slither
dont doubt - the adventures of shakespear[e] will be bitter
and force fed, intranasaly,
upsetting nose use to love powder sweet & sugary.
brilliant as the man.
n00b. lmao. your a hoot darkie.
we are the knights who say kni
IO
I thought this was okay.
and whats worse is his self pity
whining like some toddler
that i wish to beat silly
child protection laws and the knights
of respected dead farts be damned
i fucking wish the bastards bullshit
was self-respectfuly sealed and canned.
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Blessed with 10, as usual horus- your eyesight is sharp and misses little or nothing.
that would be 4 haikus for the price of one. and you seem to have done pretty well, despite the adverse tone in the commentaries... keep it up!
Thank you for creating in me a clean heart.
Poison purge my shame.
don't talk to me about drugs like i don't know shit man i've been through shit you wouldn't believe like this one time i dropped about three pink jessops and couldn't even find them again even though they were right in front of me because i was so mashed from the night before when i got well drunk u fuckin n00b
I followed your name from my poem to your page because I was pissed off at you for comparing me to horus. I was going to say some choice stuff about your bad poetry. Just my luck I get this one first... damn it all. it's just a good poem. I'll rate it now. (10)..
If you revise it..I'll rate it again then.
If I had a desire to emulate someone's poetry it would be yours.
allow me to piss on your leg.
Arrogant, yes, though much less than when i was just a tad younger, but:
i dont think im invincible, I've learned that in many painful ways.
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life is a goddamn 0 warranty zone, you can die by simply
standing on the sidewalk, a perfect choice
for a hit and run, or worse:
live only to
end up in a wheelchair.
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i know the risks i take, im probly more aware of what those risks are than you do.
your cute cliche "12 and -dude lets try drugs, i never had drugs-utterances are far from factual reality, im not talking out my ass when i say that i have studied heavily about nearly all substances able to alter a mans state of mind.
and dont try to save me, or impart your "sacred" fortune cookie wisedom, if the fools that came before you didnt effect me, then trust me, you will succeed only in looking cuddly and cute, yet still uptight.
"safe and warm" swap those two to "warm and safe". Other wise i thought this poem was a 10 and should get a GQT for sure. Strong symbolism, fantastic story and realtime essence, really, really a lovely piece.
Wait let me give you a 7, because the title is killer.