?-Dave_Mysterious-?
on Lucky Joe Finds a Ring by DreamerSupreme
18 Sep 2003, 5:39 PM
Both charming and fragrant. A triumph! -6-
I give drugs 7/10.
This poem is clever and insightfull on approximately thirteen distinct levels. Until you can understand at least the first seven, I suggest you refrain from commenting on this site.
You try really hard to be interesting.
Yes, but that means I won.
PS: cant sinners be saved?
it was better bullshit than this, and it made some amount of sense, though ofcourse it was fancy babble never-the-less.
The warrior; stupidity,
On the battle field of friends,
cmon now, atleast i didnt get corny.
Says the person who wrote a poeme called "The Mellifluous Sound of God: Musical Eden", containing the line, "Phantasmagoric reality was injected into my universe".
short, simple, amusing, and skips all the wonderfull birthday wrapping paper and extra tasteless icing.. more effective no? AYE? lucky joe, sometimes less is more..
bad joke.. DAVE... DAVID DULL, .. DAVE.. SAVE DAVE FROM HIS MUNDANE UNIVERSE - STAB ME DAVE, GET SOME ADRENALIN (its good for your blood, when i drink it, and rid the world of another boring cunt)
well.. your writing convinces me that you are not in possesion of the ability to handle intoxicants.. my ole poem:
stupid after drugs, means you
were a good actor
before meeting your wife,
who is more charming than you are
:)
lucky.. why do you feel that adding all this extra wrapping paper will make the stupid message look pretty? it looks stupid, makes little sense, and everyone with eyes can see that your layin the bullshit HEAVY.. it stinks.. shovel it. 3
This poem is semi-autobiographical.
Additional credits: -=Dark_Angel=-
lol. You should photo copy her beef curtains and solicit it to European mags for car ads.
Actually we do have memories of common experiences, it's because they are not unique that they 'combine' and form one experience. But I see where you are getting at, a mass implies an ever growing accumulation, whereas it should be a stasis of memory, where memories combine.
Thanks for the suggestions,
NDF
Interesting. I think (open to discussion) that the middle stanza is flawed in your understanding of memories. Your brain is only set up to record memories of unique incidents. Therefore we do not carry memories of the menial day-to-day. They do not form a mass.
They form a hole in our existence - vast stretches of our life without any record of our having lived it!
I think if you rewrite this poem with this understanding it will even be stronger (and the connection between death and routine that much closer).
Just a thought.
Geschäftsreise
replying on Babelfish Poetry (IV): Hablaré en pensamientos (Español) by Geschäftsreise
18 Sep 2003, 2:13 PM
Gracias (con balbucee)
If you watch enough TV, someday you shall appear on it!
My relatives read my stuff too. I can tell by the droplets of poo. (diarrhea) (sp?)
The poem just barely lived up to it's tit'e's potential, but Im a parrot. What do I know. 9.