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on my fucking dad by timvick473662003
13 Sep 2003, 8:24 PM
I like the detachment (dissociation) when you say "watching your dad beat you"- but I didn't like it as much toward the end, I couldn't really believe that the narrator would be able to be so remorseless about his/her mother's death.
you should see a shrink.
your weird.
why don't you just kick his ass.
8 for emo man
3char1per
the queer guy evaporates into chanel #5 perfume.
3char1per
O.K. something is wrong here. I can smell it (distant smell of ether.) But still waiting for the continuation, only because I want to know what happened to the queer guy, you know sillygoose. I hope the spread his entrails across three continents, That would make this an interesting read.
Well, what can I say. Hmm...She sounds really tasty, what with the socks, the skirt, etc. That alone deserves a 10.
The_Third_Isis
on Babelfish Poetry (IV): Hablaré en pensamientos (Español) by Geschäftsreise
13 Sep 2003, 7:04 PM
ola
3
this is a true piece of shit.
very interesting.
3char1per
10.
i meant to say "tother".
even my luckeypoo' poem is better.
in toher word dont quit your hill billy porn studio.
3char1per
i hope you kill yoursel over this "0"
please.
we are knights who say kni.
poo'
2.
3char1per
we are the knights who say kni.
10.
3char1per
do even know what "Angelic Fornication" means,
if you did then the poem would make more sense to you.
you should be called the brainless.
3char1per
just kidn
tis, indeed
suprembeaner
replying on Love has been awoke. (edited, needs new title) by TheVoiceless
13 Sep 2003, 5:03 PM
is it
its messing...
or you meant
its missing...
imust know.
3char1per
its better then the last poem.
3char1per
Nice poem it says just what you want it to say after reading a few comments. Quite well put together I saw the picture come together and give the meaning. Here's a 10.
Very nice. It says a lot but drags or something at the end. Maybe take out the last two lines? Here's a 9 none the less.
Conterminously--
oy.