some deleted user
on Three Brothers by EAger to Offend
8 Sep 2003, 10:02 PM
Very nice! I love your structure and imagery!
So she left a comment but didn't leave a comment? Would you please at least try to make a little sense?
A 0 does not indicate the worst poem ever built. It represents a remarquably bad poem. And though I don't always concur with my dear friend razorgrin's opinions -- she has made some truly dreadful judgements in the past, both in likes and dislikes -- I'm afraid I must concur that in this case she was right. That WAS a terrible poem you wrote. The fact that a lot of idiotic young goths with bad tastes gave your poem tens does not mean it's a good poem. It means that a lot of young goths have no taste. That's all.
god, how i have missed your wit. welcome home, razor.
--the poet formerly known as z.
La parte che ha tradotto correttamente era bella. L'ultima linea avete detto, "Sapete that urlano for you". Elaborereste su questa linea?
oh grow up. if she really wanted to piss you off, she would have left you a fucking 5, like i just did.
Well, you see, she did leave a comment. Then she proceeded to give a zero without a comment. When it falls within a minute, it's fairly obvious. I know I rambled at the end, but 0's without comments really pissssssss me off. There are 1's and 2's etc. If you think a poem sucks bad enough to deserve a 0, then it must be the shittiest poem ever built. This one happened to have several 10's. So, are we to assume that razorgrin--No, let's not make assumptions. Would you care to read my last three posted? Thank you.
Come on Electro, your first attempt made the top 20. Considering all the pagans on this site SHEEEEIT.
I have to agree with nentwined, before you post a poem, read it aloud to yourself. You will find that the flow doesn't exist. Just read it to yourself and try again.
Dear sir/madam/whatever you have the misfortune of being:
If she doesn't leave a comment, then how d'you know it was her giving you the zero? Ta ta.
P.S.: hmm... started off well, but the last four lines made it lose its charm. You should have spent a little more time there. Only 7/10, sorry.
I didn't mean to bash your best bud, but I couldn,t think of anything else to rhyme with vote.
Here,s a 0 for the bitch in a tree
For all the 0's she's given me
I don't care for her her shit I have to say
But when giving her 0's I don't go out of my way
But now I'm playing the game she plays.
She looks at the best of the poems here
Then hands me 0's like she has no fear.
It's not the content
or the rhythm that gets her bent
Or maybe it is
How the FUCK would we know
if she doesn't leave a comment.
But that's just like our friend
To leave the worst possible vote
Like the poem could be written
by her sex partner the goat.
What happened? You seemed so happy.
I have a poem about a 89 year old client of mine who lives in an assisted living home, but you did such a good job of showing us this place and telling a story that I dare not post mine. Excellent. 10
Do you mean "whiskey"?
You know I love it. I ate nigh-on half of that pie...
If you don't like it, pass it on down the table.
Good call, I didn't even notice until you said it. I will certainly, contemplatively, seriously and harshly take a reluctantly adversarial look at my adverb problem.
Fantastic. Heh, Father Ted. On a more serious note, Darling, I missed you! Let's never be apart again!
I understand exactly what you're saying.... I struggle with the same issue. A good sergeon always makes a minimal number of cuts when working her craft. Wel, if all else fails we've got a great future at the local butcher shop!
Angel,
Think about fashioning the words you've used above into a poem. You write with great passion about this matter. I'm sure you would knock out a 10!! Go for it!!