fuzzylogicisagimp
replying on I'll Save You The Effort by wwFrasier Allonbyww
1 Aug 2003, 9:21 AM
Name one such occasion and I will deny your allegation in the strongest possible terms.
ahem?
But I have never once acted like an asshole!
but the poem is quite humorous. have a 10. because we are amused, sir.
no, only when you act like an asshole.
you still have plenty of untainted ids.
no, luckyjoe. it's taking the catsuit off that gives me the superpowers. i write nekkid.
I did notice, but I didn't comment on you and your daughter's "touching" moment, did I? "Some of her friends are ethnics" etc. My French Catholic father-in-law is named Leroy, and I, being from the South, never in my life met a Black person named Leroy.
Interesting poem... but after reading the comments... if its not a war poem or an anti-war poem... umm what is it? *confused as normal*
Do you only wear the cat suit when you feel the need to write? Gives you super powers to write better than anyone else? :) hehe
Sorry the cat suit got me interested... but please no claws...
i believe she had them all her life. Anne was responsible for making long flowing sleeves popular, to hide her deformity.
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leave it be. it really works.
(psst---think rodent. think man setting trap, woman finding smashed mousy. eek!)
WOW THIS IS BRILLIANT.
(See, walrus8, what good poetry looks like. Take a good long look. And then go and flush your head down a toilet.)
Lots of people cheered.
I had just figured out what you were doing in the first and second stanzas with the first word when you switched back to the more linear form. I think if you are going to go with that interesting style you should go all the way. But, I wouldn't necessarily advise you going with the style of the 1st and 2nd stanzas- too annoying to read. The message is good.
Didn't you find it even remotely odd that the black kid was called Leroy and that I kissed my six year old daughter ON THE LIPS? You're racist. And sick.
Thanks. Six fingers all of her life, or six fingers at birth? I might need to work this in. Was it one of those little stubby deformities with a bone but no joints that is about the size of a section of one of the other fingers, or what?
You are so cold. She came, so why not groan in dismount? Moan is too obvious, plus, this is sleep induced sex (with no "rubards" involved, "sweaty pie"), so she's freaking tired!
Thanks for the feedback, I'll have to change that around to clarify. The cat wasn't supposed to be the catalyst of the dismount, instead, the lovers came, and then as the narrator dismounted, the cat's sleeping place was disturbed (but I wanted to end with the dismount, not the cat).