SupremeDreamer
on Infection by nocturnalism
29 Jul 2003, 1:54 AM
cmon..i got the idea but you could of had more imagination with the presentation, it left me with a sensation of emptiness..5.
Supple for the lost ones. Roaring for the found.
Run! Be a courtesan they're always better equipped for the highs and lows of love.
"The rocking back-and-forth of the boat" might flow better. "The tingling sensation in your nose of new smells" "This is good, isnât it?" "What life is really made of."
Not to shabby.
The reason why god gave men the hunter's nose.
"Lalochezia" Well, now I've heard it all.
an den? Gothic Blowjob and a cure sticker.
<{Baba^Yaga}>
replying on #1 entry from Chico, the star stalker on Pico by <{Baba^Yaga}>
28 Jul 2003, 11:44 PM
lol. Certainly, I was just shaking your cage. Thanks for your feedback as of late. When did you join the ranker?
thepinkbunnyofdoom
replying on Poemranker's Recent Infestation of Teenage Girls by 68.75.19.117
28 Jul 2003, 11:38 PM
Just so that you know, I'm not picking it up.
Whats sad is if it wasn't you that wrote this, I'd say I see the poetic meaning here. -8-.
LOL. Thanks, You just have a way of making me smile. A 10 just because you spend so much time, investigating my life.
http://mulberryfairy
replying on #1 entry from Chico, the star stalker on Pico by <{Baba^Yaga}>
28 Jul 2003, 7:54 PM
If you are talking about the typo "was" versus "was not", my excuse is my work schedule. If you are talking about the topic, I will excuse myself w/ idealism. See bio.
My heart goes out to that innocent octopus. Nice storytelling.
I liked "I decline out of guilt and fear and love and space." The "My mind concludes/ To much weight./For such a short time." is confusing unless "to" is supposed to be "too" and there is not supposed to be a period after weight. But you are right, bathtubs aren't made for two.
DreamerSupreme
replying on Deranged Sailor: Sea Sickness [revised] by SupremeDreamer
28 Jul 2003, 7:01 PM
roger roger. ;)
I've seen several animals get the axe recently: a roach, a fox, and now an octopus. Fry them all up, I say, and lets have one last giant barbeque.
Nice poem... gives a message but also stays hid. I like poems that can't be fully understood leaving the reader room to fill in the gaps as the see fit... thats how some of the best poetry ever written has been. Keep up the good work and keep on writing.
This thing about put me in a legoleptic fit, so it certainly is a good thing that I am lamiacious, and therefore not affected by such afflictions. Certainly this is better than some of the the lalochezia that usually occurs here.
Nice... not sure the whole meaning of the poem... but do we the readers truely have to understand to still enjoy poetry? Keep up the work and keep on writing.