LuckyJoe
on I Am a Snob, or, 'A Definition' by JakeBike
28 Jul 2003, 6:25 PM
Everyone does start small... even after writing years and years its nice to go back to the roots and see if the simplisity (spelling) is still there. Often times its hard to get back to your roots. My first poem I ever wrote was back in 4th grade... short...sweet...simple. Here it is...
May we never depart,
May the love always stay true.
Shall it not stay,
Can destiny discover that we were made for each other?
May life lead us the right way.
Please hold on.
I liked the poem, but don't get melodramatic.
8, for the legs now floating, dead.
<{Baba^Yaga}>
replying on #1 entry from Chico, the star stalker on Pico by <{Baba^Yaga}>
28 Jul 2003, 5:19 PM
"Yeah, I can tell you're drunk by your slurred typing. But, anyway, I was trying to be judgmental, I just wondered what compelled you to comment in that way so frequently"
Since he's drunk... What's your excuse?
want some calamari with that tartar sauce? ;x 8.
now now, we aint havin fish sticks. :P
Tar tar, 101.
oink. im now a boar with horns. ;)
Aye, home protection kicks ass.. ;) 8.
Nice. Discovery channel narrative.. i enjoyed the read. 9.
WAHOO! Heil HORUS! LEAD ME MY GENERAL! ONWARDS ONWARDS, TWARDS THE FUTURE.. i like the pictures though.. ;P 10.
SupremeDreamer
replying on Deranged Sailor: Sea Sickness [revised] by SupremeDreamer
28 Jul 2003, 3:30 PM
Well.. first you hate me, then you say im the best.. im confused to a point of dizziness.
fake, originality is nothing if it dosent come from the heart and this sounds as if you have tried to use metaphors cleaverly instead of speaking what you treuly feel...therefore the poem is to impress rather than to express your emotion? pah what do i know!
dearest, its about the fact that we are not allowed to live the way we want because someone else has an idea on how it should be done
(line 5) religion restricts the things that makes one happy
(line 8) someone who dosent want to follow set rules is made to do so
(line 10) cripples are constantly persecuted
Ha!
Like it a lot - I agree with Horus8 however "of conscience" seems to muddy the last line. 8
No, why.
lol. "but that isn't different
that is called being alone" vintage.
SupremeDreamer
replying on #1 entry from Chico, the star stalker on Pico by <{Baba^Yaga}>
28 Jul 2003, 1:08 PM
you have power.. words. my good friend, have you forgotten the power of the pen? ;P
SupremeDreamer
replying on #1 entry from Chico, the star stalker on Pico by <{Baba^Yaga}>
28 Jul 2003, 1:06 PM
Hrmm. Whats with the hateful anger good ole pal? And I'm rubbish eh? oh well. i guess i just do what me can. ;)