DurtKL
replying on Poemranker's Recent Infestation of Teenage Girls by 68.75.19.117
26 Jul 2003, 11:31 PM
yea sure
DurtKL
replying on #1 entry from Chico, the star stalker on Pico by <{Baba^Yaga}>
26 Jul 2003, 11:29 PM
i didn't mean suck my dickl
i just got home
and i'm drunk now
i would like to solve this
pecasfully so ignore
my negative comments earlier
but i am not a racist
i sayd fucking kroeans and theri kareoke
cuz i am kroean and i understand korean obseesion
with that fucking cursed device
i had to deal with my paretns invititng
their friendss over every weeeknd night to sing
horribly in fron to of our fuking tv
ogodnith
DurtKL
replying on #1 entry from Chico, the star stalker on Pico by <{Baba^Yaga}>
26 Jul 2003, 11:27 PM
u think i'm racist?
ha ok
my white castle poem
was about stereotypes
saying NIGGER and SPIC
doesn't always have to
mean to be racist
they are words
strong words
i wasn't trying to be a
neo nazi son of hitler shit
ok?
and i used racials slurs in ONE fucking poems
so why don't you stfu
DurtKL
replying on #1 entry from Chico, the star stalker on Pico by <{Baba^Yaga}>
26 Jul 2003, 11:22 PM
hey
fuck you
i am korean
so suck my dick
i can SEE this. 8.
this sounds really sincere and deep.. 8.
yes, that's the word. lyrical. excellent. 9.
I'm brown in the summer
orange in the fall
white in the winter
And Spring reddens them all.
Written horribly purposely.
I feel it's close, but could be arranged somehow better or strengthened too. We shall see on a later edit no doubt. Thanks kindly in the meantime.
sigh... To sleep, for the first time in forever.
You and I both know that if this poem had been as graphic about the subjects of sex and/or feces that you, and other p-rankers, wouldn't complain. Actually, I am aware that I have a dangerous tendency to be wordy (especially for the short attention span of the poemranker audience). I thought about taking out the first stanza, but it seemed like it needed the background- so you could imagine what kinds of Maine people that fox might have also come in contact with.
http://mulberryfairy
replying on #1 entry from Chico, the star stalker on Pico by <{Baba^Yaga}>
26 Jul 2003, 7:53 PM
DurtKL, I sincerely wonder what compels you to use racial slurs every chance you get? Do you do it for laughts, or are you actually angry at various racial and ethnic groups?
"I fully understand that the living need to remember."
What do they need to remember and why? Of course you'll be forgotten in 10,000 years, I suggest you deal with your existential angst, rather than try to ensure that people remember you, graveyards are a waste of space. Of course, these comments are directed toward the "narrator", not the author.
"Panoramica" and "views of enslaved cattle" work well together, as do "Kakistocracy" and "Citizens Cained". I'm not sure if I'm getting the best complete picture, but the whole reminds me of Fast Food Nation.
This IS a lonely place.
A lovely drama. I like the little moral at the end.
Can I make requests, and be like a 'ranger' and haul lil bastards in?
exciting!
But hey, if you've got six pack abs, you're good to go right? right? Fine job pardno. Good to see you're still pluggin'