horus8
replying on Yellow Star by Mr Pig
22 Jul 2003, 8:16 PM
i thought my poem a pig and jew on island was hilarious did you read that? Good god,I put some shit in there that had me shaking my head while writing it. It's brilliant, read it again. I even take a cheapshot on the dark one in it. Debating good... Agreeing bad... by the way, I hope you'er not tired, because I was writing left handed while debating you. My right hand is teaching my son had to read. i'm so happy, i got him into one of the best K-5 schools in Southern California. 800.00 a month but it's worth it. And he's only three going on four. I'm so very proud of him, and glad had the time to home school him for this last year. He's a beautiful wiz. My boy, my baby boy's going to school. I'm so excited.
Thank you, what a lovely thing to say.
i wish you write a book about this.. addiction to words is my disease, your writing makes me a crack whore needing a fix.
i feel small.. ;/ 10.
Well damn... your no longer in denial.. 10. ;)
beautiful. Nice juxtaposition of the coming and going at the end.
Reminds me of Phish at Limestone, Maine. I like the ending.
What's a bullrack?
Nice. Don't forget the politician and the actor.
Because writing it gave me a big fat zit on my forehead?
Does it matter? As it reads, would you say it was July's sister?
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The names have been changed to protect the innocent and/or guilty.
That wouldn't be funny even if you were smart enough to spell diarrhea correctly.
Well, I'd wondered what "Pimple" poems had in common.
Thanks for the feedback, I don't think many people have the attention span for a "poem" this long. What is this about "pray to penis for rent"? Didn't you read I'm a social worker?
Well, this particular poem happens to be part of a set of non-fiction memoirs of poetic moments that I've witnessed w/ my daughter, so it's hard to imagine it any other way.
Harsh, but delicious ... sorry, I'm actually just hungry.
You almost had me until temp'ry ... nice try, doesn't work. At first I thought you were going for a sonnet and I think you should try to take it there.
This is rather lovely.
I am your friend never forget that. What we did here was communicate our beliefs and that's a damn healthy thing.
ohh pretty. i like it. = )