Terence
replying on Paean by Terence
19 Jul 2003, 1:59 AM
Thanks! Are you sure you didn't prefer JBH's scallop/barnacle rewrite?
Thank you, and I have to agree with you. I never really was happy with it it dosent really flow the way I would like, but I do believe it was a bad day and I really wasnt "flowing" realy great either. It is one I will be returning to at a later date!!
I really like this poem :)
alas.. if this was written better, i would love it.. but im forced to bless it with 7, not higher.. ;(
The rubber glove snaps
As I bend to touch my toes
Liquid burritos
-- i love this stanza.. ;P 9.
I like it.. but i think it could have been better written/presented. 7.
Its a cute lil piece, the only thing i really liked was the oyster/pearl bit.. reminds me of a poem i wrote when i was 15. blessed with 8. welcome to the ranker!
Damn good writing. 10.
Golden Calf Award? Whats that?
GQT.
How about a ten to move you up the ladder on the 'best' chart? God knows you deserve some respect after this fucking abortion of poetry. 10!
i assure I am not a thief, i wrote this before i ever really got into poetry.
Its a bit child-like seeing how i am a child, but i thank you for the opinion, and i will try to polish it.
but you weren't?
Gramaricaly abandoned.
"But she went to there to stay." My friend Vipersna invented this form, you are a thief! Nah, there are some interesting normal reactions to abandonment here, you are not alone, hang on, to this 6.
Must you say that naughty word that has nothing to do with skin color other than 1,ooo's of years of persecution and lies, death, humilty, fear. Because... Even words need to be set free from their sterotypage by generations of unimaginative flesh peddlars.
Ahh, isn't that just sweet... now diE! Just kidding.