Bachus
replying on Seven by Dangzter
15 Jun 2003, 5:14 PM
Caves full.
I concure with Richa. It's too loose.
Noun or verb instead of "one".
Lord, don't let me in. Save yourself from the onslaught of homosexuals, niggers, chinks, and Jews that would inturn ensue. Think of the integrity of heaven Lord. I believe, Lord, I must decline because I love you and the others to much to risk the impurity.
Shat, shate, and shating make reading any poor poets poem worth it, but the rest of your work here is shat, and particularly general and unimaginative. Perhaps if you would have fucked Dina with a dwarf's gnarled caloused fist holding a square bowling ball? Or turned the spider into Carl Jung's left testicle carrying a rose in it's teeth, maybe if you added the noise of an airplane flying overhead, or a loudspeaker ending a factory's break, I might of felt more connected?
or is it fluttering, like toilet paper grabbing for it's last rim of hope?
normally,yes. this was intentional. Danka.
you're gonna make me work, aren't you?