horus8
on To Mouse and Reason by Spindle
15 Jun 2003, 12:20 PM
You should read this first, and then proceed with the utmost caution. good luck.
http://poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?i
Flattering
Pimple Poem Buddy. Felt by you and every one else. Love the Title, Hate the Drivel beneath. Not trying to be mean but I've got a bummer sticker that says the same damn thing without being nearly as long or annoyingly repeative, while stating the obvious.
Could have been done better, should have ryhmed better in some places (i.e. Jack be nimble, but he just synched his) and You forgot some major ones such as Humpty Dumpty, Litte Mack Horner, and Little Miss Blew Sheep. -1- just because you took my Idea and fucked it up. J/K -7-.
the last two were brilliant
I think "Distant friend,". Other than that, Fairly nice. -7-
The lines that "inspired" you from the book are given as an example of a "driveling song". What, Sir, do you think of that?
Of course you do, you stupid shit. You have absolutely no understanding of poetry, so you're amazed by anything that looks like it might be meaningful (read: contains words like "zephyr" and is impossible to understand on a casual reading).
My otra comment is lost, and should go back to whenceforth it came. Keee-lar.
a bird in a cage cannot fly.
nutcase. and not far from right.
I'm with squiggles. spot on.
Great title, great moniker. poor poem . IPK's right.
try again.
get a life..too much repition. try going to a church, there is infinite love there, after all it was god who gave his son. And only you can decide what it is you are to be. so make someting of it2
squeaky dissertation
horus... horus... tsk tsk.
oh sweet romantix, if i may interject thy willowy serenading. i love the last line, but i want to be led there on streaming chrome shiny wind in my ears through the lonely blare of headlights. you r almost there.