What is this supposed to be? Its a random, half introspection inspired and begun with a third grade rhyme. True, I don't like you and think you are an idiot, but this poem deserves low marks anyways.

I do feel this a bit but it is rather ordinary good try though

I dont understand your motivation for writing this.

No, this is too obvious the rhyme/ the sentiment Try get to the root of the feeling and its relation to other things

Interesting to us something modern and consumer as a truck to illustrate 'the beauty of the all' I think the snappy sentences work well and fit together there is nothing too obvious to make me cringe here a pleasant read

I guess you've rubbed someone up the wrong way the sheer number of zeros you get is quite impressive I do think these poems need a lot more personal thought and insight though they seem a bit assinine and the statements seem unqualified I got loads of bad marks when i first came on here. I guess you have to read the work of your audience and learn some lessons from it Then if you get good you can do your own thing again a nd be pretentious like a proper artist!

I guess not. But maybe you can make up for it by writing about your uninteresting emotions in an uninteresting way!!

Did you write this poeme by writing down a list of all the words you think would appeal to a 14-year-old girl, randomise their order, and then just insert other words between them to create sentences?

The first two lines are plagiarised from 1984 fag.

Try to edit this making each sentence seperate yet connected, lover.

whore

uhm...a sonnet has 14 lines buddy...

Probably the worst peice of crap I've ever read. -0- DING!

Shut up.